Interesting pattern and flow; who doesn't love a good hooker poem?

this is beautiful, flows nicely

This has a very nice rhythem to it and I like the message as well. However, do you really need the parentheses? Personally, I think you could prove your point much better without them. Parentheses are generally used for extra, almost unnecessary info, but what you have in yours seems far from unnecessary. Over all, great job!

this is pretty interesting.
i can't tell if its feminist or whatever but it makes you think.