This was wonderful Star!!
This is the first that I have had a chance to read your work, and it is masterfully done. I like the pace and the feeling that is portrayed throughout. You keep to the contest rules of using the red string.

The descriptions of the others in the dream give body to the piece in that it displays other life lessons in truths, that pertain to the string. Excellent job of imagery there.

I enjoyed the formating of your work in how it gives, snippets of wisdom. The ending was so sad, that I was a little teary eyed, but it is relevant to show how strong love is, even after death.

It was a well planned, and executed piece that had me wishing that it would continue for the poor girl. The emotions you display moved me ma dear and this is certainly a winner.

Good luck with the judges!!
Momo - Nomad of the Promised Land

Wow, that was beautiful. A very excellent piece of work, if I say so myself.

This was really beautiful...you did a great job. :)