Oh, this was good. You don't need to worry about humor, it really got me cracking up at the end, hahaha. XD

i loved the sarcasm in here. hillarious.

I like it. It's cute and clever and made me smile. The rhythm is a bit awkward and shaky though. Try reading it allowed to see how you an adjust it. Other than that it seemed good.

Nicki :)

[But it’s been 5 million years and 81 days

I’m thinking, that’s enough.]
Hahaha, awesome ending.

[Look, I’m sorry, okay?

Please, will you dry your tears?]
Here's an example: I like how you managed to show the narrator's character through such a short poem. The narrator had a voice.

Nice job.

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Good luck in WCC.

The punchline was really strong, it just hit you because it was so unexpected. I don't think you have to worry regarding the humor department :)

I do think you could tighten up the first two stanzas. They were bland. If I didn't know there was a punchline waiting, I would zone out. Tighten doesn't mean shorten, for the record. Just...maybe word it more interestingly? Get a more established rhythm? Sorry for being so vague, I can't really think of how else to word it.

Good luck in the WCC!

Frac

I like this. I'd say it's a sort of tragic-humour, or a sort of depressing humour, if you know what I mean. I thought that the colloquial language you used in combination with the dismissive attitude of the narrator was effective.

I was confused as to why you picked the number: "5 million years and 81 days" but hey, randomness is good sometimes :) Unless it wasn't random, and I'm missing a point somewhere (as I tend to do, haha).

Anyway, good luck in the WCC!

-Amy

5 million years? that's a long time. I think it was about time for him to break up with her. Great poem it's pretty funny!

I really like this. You held on for 5 million years. Good job. I like the rhymes.

meh, it was sorta funny. but mostly i thought it was sad. i mean he dumped her.

Ha! I thought that was absolutely adorable! Write more like it OK?