|Reviews for Kingdoms of the Fountain: Book 1|
| strobeXlightXstatic 2/10/09 . chapter 8
I am a bit confused. Maybe if you added some more to each chapter && made them a fraction more detailed, it would be easier to comprehend, seeing as our letle brains are functioning at different paces. Anyway, kudos, doll!
| Toffee-Apple 2/7/09 . chapter 6
Hmm... interesting... I like it! The narrator seems a little devious- I like them.
P.S- is it male or female? That is the question (lol)
| Toffee-Apple 2/7/09 . chapter 4
Wow, great way to end this chapter! You really create good suspense! Awsome!
| mashergirl14 2/6/09 . chapter 3
whos point of view is this story from?
| Toffee-Apple 2/6/09 . chapter 2
OH! It's getting exciting!
UPDATE SOON PLEASE!
| strobeXlightXstatic 2/5/09 . chapter 2
I'LL BE A READER! PICK ME! PICK ME! PICKMEPICKMEPICKME- -ahem- sorry. well, anyway, overall, this story is rather interesting. A few spelling && grammatical errors here && there, but rather charming. (ugh, I sound like my mom.)
...can you tell I've had caffeine?
| Toffee-Apple 2/4/09 . chapter 1
You know it's a pretty good first draft. I think to improve it I would introduce the narrator; you use "I" so tell us who is "I" or do we not find out untill the next chapter? The idea of the three monarchs is good- overall I really liked it!