This was intersting to read, i liked the way it flowed and how it described love. I also really like the title, it was creative.

Wow! This is very deep! Good job!

"I can hear it rasping, gurgling straight through the stem." This part connects so well to the previous line about 'no hazard in its red folds.' The imagery is quite haunting!

I liked the lion/mouth part. "In hunger or despair." I thought that was wonderful, that you left it up to the reader to decide whether the lion is hungry for nourishment of a physical or an emotional kind.

"Lobotomized by love." BRILLIANT! :D