|Reviews for Going Through The Motions|
| Mirabella 11/7/09 . chapter 1
Very emotive, and the rhyming works well. :)
| Isca 4/27/09 . chapter 3
"And I feel as if I'm floating through this life." This line is absolutely stunning-the hopeless/painful tone works so well here.
"Nobody seems to question the reddened skin that burns." I question! I question! Are you okay, m'dear?
"The petals flutter to the ground and shrivel in the sun." BEAUTIFUL IMAGERY! WOW! :D
| kloun mannequin 4/15/09 . chapter 2
these emotions are complicated but so true.
| kloun mannequin 4/15/09 . chapter 1
it sounds as if you're your own friend, anyway, great piece.
| Peachesandcream15 4/14/09 . chapter 1
Better every time I read it :-) i love the line, "I hope my dear you're not afraid of heights," The patronising tone and the raw emotion are fantastic Beautifully written as always.
| Isca 3/31/09 . chapter 2
"I cannot be free if my mind chooses not to misgive its memories." You must find a way to be at peace with your memories. As for you A/N, it's true, the only person who can really help you is yourself.
| chartonjeremiah 2/15/09 . chapter 1
It was a bit of a shock to see you use the word "fuck" especially so early in a poem but I was glad to see that you did not use it gratuitously. It worked well and seemed the right word to use.
I really liked the last stanza as well. A well written poem all round.
| LostInMe 2/6/09 . chapter 1
Not a rhyme scheme commonly found on this site. A good choice, though, and you used it well.
| Isca 2/5/09 . chapter 1
"Or maybe I'll just shoot you first, and scream as if it's unrehearsed." This part flowed particularly well, and the message is dramatic and vivid.