 Mirabella 2009-11-07 . chapter 1Very emotive, and the rhyming works well. :)
Brilliant. :) |
 Isca 2009-04-27 . chapter 3"And I feel as if I'm floating through this life." This line is absolutely stunning--the hopeless/painful tone works so well here.
"Nobody seems to question the reddened skin that burns." I question! I question! Are you okay, m'dear?
"The petals flutter to the ground and shrivel in the sun." BEAUTIFUL IMAGERY! WOW! :D |
 kloun mannequin 2009-04-15 . chapter 2these emotions are complicated but so true. |
 kloun mannequin 2009-04-15 . chapter 1it sounds as if you're your own friend, anyway, great piece. |
 Peachesandcream15 2009-04-14 . chapter 1 Better every time I read it :-) i love the line, "I hope my dear you're not afraid of heights," The patronising tone and the raw emotion are fantastic ^^ Beautifully written as always.
Ily x |
 Isca 2009-03-31 . chapter 2"I cannot be free if my mind chooses not to misgive its memories." You must find a way to be at peace with your memories. As for you A/N, it's true, the only person who can really help you is yourself. |
 chartonjeremiah 2009-02-15 . chapter 1It was a bit of a shock to see you use the word "fuck" especially so early in a poem but I was glad to see that you did not use it gratuitously. It worked well and seemed the right word to use.
I really liked the last stanza as well. A well written poem all round. |
 LostInMe 2009-02-06 . chapter 1Not a rhyme scheme commonly found on this site. A good choice, though, and you used it well. |
 Isca 2009-02-05 . chapter 1"Or maybe I'll just shoot you first, and scream as if it's unrehearsed." This part flowed particularly well, and the message is dramatic and vivid. |