On the surface it appears very simple, yet I think there's so much more of a provacative nature to it.

The portrait of the old man, unloading items, in a sense, freeing himself of things. Moving objects aside. Making room for himself? While the girl, in all of her all-knowing-naivete, is in reality doing the same thing, although she's accusitaory to the man for his actions.

That's just want I got from it. I loved it.

Much love,
Juliet.

Pretty brilliant. Love the juxtaposition of the girl and the old man.

Beautiful. Very atmospheric for me. I could just picture the girl rolling her eyes and thinking he was a waste of space. Absolutely beautiful.
S

this one makes me cry. i have a soft spot for old men. my grandpa is awesome.
"his wallet is as lined as his face
but he pays
with a crisp green bill."
i love that juxtaposition. it's really well placed.
"he has lived,
and is no fool."
i think that line is beautiful.
the last line is gorgeous, and haunting. reminds us all that we're mortal.

When I see people like this, sometimes I want to know their life story or just see them smile.

aww =[ i like this. the first stanza especially delicate and beautiful. well written. REALLY well written. i love it.

amazing. simply amazing.