You always leave me speechless from your writing. I can't even find the words to describe how beautiful your poetry - and this poem especially - is. The line "i can't risk this/whirlwind of electric flames" really resonates with me. The imagery is beautiful, and you seem to create (intentional or not) this consistent picture of strobe lights, which I just love.

You're an amazing poet. Amazing isn't even a great enough adjective.

"The sun sinks." I love the vibrant sun imagery throughout--it's beautiful! :)

"There is utter darkness for a moment." It's as if time stopped for a moment. This line is so captivating.

"Strobe hearted liked coney island." What a wonderful line! Your writing just keeps improving. Good lord, you're awesome!

The 'doors' part near the end just completely floored me--it's profound and brilliant!

-Isca

I like the references to strobe lights and Coney Island, and also "electric" and "impulse". They all follow a theme, and it's good for the unity of the poem. :)

I love love love these lines:
"i can't risk being this flattened polaroid
behind the glue of your caustic eyes,
with these molars receding
into their mother gums,
my gray tongue slipping out
like a killed fish." Just gorgeous.

I'm not a big fan of repetition, i.e., "or all the doors I've been, or all the doors I've been," but if you like it it's not a big deal; it's just one of my pet peeves, I suppose. Remember that where you have repetition you're filling up a place that could otherwise house your beautiful images. Haha.

Finally, fifth line from the bottom, "I'd" should be "I've" to keep it in the same tense.

Really great job with this; your vocabulary is rich and savory. Loved it.