You have such elegance in your work, it's so beautiful.
I envy your talent.

Nicely written, with well thought-out concepts. I like the original way you describe things - "shells of melon bellies" and "mudslide of blood" are examples.

Just a question - you used Hindu-related words more than once in this poem. Is there a particular reason why?

Violet: Moon poetry means just what it sounds like it means -- poetry about the moon (or that includes the moon).

This is absolutely beautiful.
The imagery is just fantastic! It's little things, like rather than saying "cloudy nights" you say "cloud-choked nights, and "gazelle elbowed and bumblebee knuckled."
Things like that just make it a Maisha poem.
I could just go on and on, even though parts of it I don't understand, but I'll just say it's wonderful and I favorited it.
I'm excited to hear more!

-Violet Marx

P.S. What is this moon poetry you speak of?

i discovered you just
now by accident at just
in and am beyond glad i
did. while i think this
has a little bit of grit
in it, perhaps as you
say it's cos it's to be
belted out, not read.
but this is fantastic.