See? I've made progress. I'm actually logged-in this time.

Cabrian is hot. But it would've been better if he were wet, naked from the waist up, and Leila jumped him and ravaged him. That's what I totally would've done.

I mean, getting chased by a dude that calls you "rabbit," and actually getting away from him. It might make one a bit more adventurous. As in doing it on the forest floor and making lots and lots of cute, squealing Cambrian babies.

Okay. So that wasn't creepy at all. But whateverz.

And I'm rewriting chapter 5 of PBP. So watch out for that soon. :)

I HATE YOU FOR WHAT YOU'RE PLANNING. AND NO, CHANGING THIS CHAPTER TO ACCOMIDATE MY FANTESIES WOULD NOT CHANGE THAT.

cool story, hope you continue... I hope an explanation is in the next chapter!

Totally never realized that I hadn't reviewed this. But here I am! Muhaha. But yeah. I've read this and it's awesome, but I want Cabrian.

PS. I'll never forgive you, still. Just fyi.

Things were definitely clearer with the detail you added. As I already said, I'm interested to see what's going to happen to Leila and if Cambrian is going to come back into the picture. Hope the next chapter is coming along!

-Steph

This is a good start. A few errors here and there, and some of the sentence structures are a little off, but overall well written.
Cannot wait to read more.

Love the name Cambrian. Otherwise, good!

I like this angle. It's interesting, and I like that there's the language barrier between Cambrian and Leila because watching them overcome that could add another layer to this that wasn't there in the other two versions of this.

Have you found a beta yet? Because I'd be willing to beta this for you. Just let me know what sort of editing you're actually looking for, because I can do just about anything you need.

Sorry. I'm a bit too lazy to log-in at the moment. :'D

But, awesome beginning. Cambrian's just as hot as I remembered him. And I promise to be a good girl and not say spoiling stuff over my reviews. :D I know you'd killed me if I did. And I feel like living until I get to college.

Anyways, I think you portrayed their timidness toward each other well. It was cute, almost. xD

Anyways. I'm out. :D