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| dragonflydreamer 4/16/10 . chapter 1
Hm, mixed feelings about this one. The images are really beautiful individually, and they all have a general feeling relating to the rain, but they don't feel as if they connect entirely.
What I do really like about this are your stanza breaks. They give you a lot of control over the readers' pacing and how they're taking in the story, but still feel natural.
["excuse me" but never "sorry".] This was actually my favorite line of the piece. The wording wasn't as extravagant as some of the others, but it had the strongest sentiment.
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