Yey it's longer. :)

Not much to say about this one. Good use of dialogue.

I'm not sure if I like how Meredith is all smiley-happy when she sees Isaac. It's an almost abrupt change in character. She was sobbing and unresponsive and now she is waving at him and smiling. Do you see what I mean?

Nice work!

Katie

Well this one is quite interesting.
I feel like it gives away a lot of the setting without coming out and saying where it is. Like your usage of words 'pub' instead of 'bar', how the barmaid says 'love'. Very subtle, but effective.

These chapters are so short you almost can't call them chapters. o.o

Maybe that's intentional.

Katie

Such short chapters!

There's a sentence in here that's worded funny...

'Isaac felt his self slipping away from him, everything slipping away.'

It might be better if you just said 'Isaac felt himself slipping away, everything was slipping away.'

How you've worded it is confusing.

Nicely done again!

Katie

I like your descriptions a lot, they create very vivid images and emotions.

I don't know if he would exactly say 'hallucinations' because to her they are probably real, so if he wanted her to open up about them maybe it would be better. I know she can't talk, but he doesn't know that yet. Just a suggestion.

Nice work. :D

Katie

Aw, I love this chapter. Esepically the way you ended it with Issac and Meredith. :D I like the fear you brought out and just.. amazing as usual!! :)

Rolliepollie44

Okay, i am seriously impressed with this story and your descriptions, just the way you write it with such intensity, wow. :D I love this, very suspensful, very interesting; I like the part with Meredith having her breakdown.

Rolliepollie44

Another wonderful chapter...thanks for continuing!

Oh, I hate James. He's evil, I feel so bad for her but you gotta love how Anges took the situation. :D Anyways, the part with the inferno of red hair, amazing imagery, this chapter was amazingly written. Much enjoyed! :D

Rolliepollie44

Oh poor Agnes...to have been used like that!

I hope she and Meredith escape with Isaac and along with Jen find some happier times

Yay! :D Update. Yikeess.. Woah. That was shocking, I can't believe she did that, and she always seemed so innocent? I loved how you described the scene, you captured it perfectly, I could picture everything perfectly clearly. :D Beautiful work in this chapter. I really hope you start writing this again soon. It's getting really, really good!!

Rolliepollie44

Phew. Took me long enough to review! Anyways, this chapter was.. amazing. I don't think it was cheesy at all, the idea of the story makes that automatically not cheesy. :D I loved it, I love Agnes, and can't wait to hear more about 'James'. I'm so interested it's insane, this is amazing, and when you said "sunshine and cinnamon" great imagery really. That part stuck out to me. I love this. Update! :D

Rolliepollie44

I love this story...nicely done

Update soon

I really like this story and I saw the pictures on your deviant art. I made another account; MmePandoraSpocks

Aw. That is so sad about the patients. Really great, I'm loving this. Love his dream and the romance between him and Meredith even if it's kind.. of.. twisted. I love this chapter, the dream is so perfecct, you do a good job of keeping it in line and actually with the story. :) Great chapter. This is getting really good. :D

Rolliepollie44

I lovvee how you write the warden. He's so animated, I love it. :) But he himself, is a bit creepy.. well really, really creepy. This is getting good. Apologies for the late review! :)

Rolliepollie44