im confuzzled

Garrett is a great villain...I could imagine him being a villain in a big time film!
I love the part in the middle just before the interval,the way you described Trinity slipping away slowly...it was astounding.
I am in love with your writing because it is enjoyable to read...I adore it.
I can't wait for more of anything from you!
~Ben

Oh my...that was an amazing development...a good story is unpredictable with twists, turns and a great storyline, and you have surpassed these standards hugely! I also love the little glimmers of humour you blend in with the serious storyling...I feel like I am getting to know your personality through your writing style.
If you handed this in at school, your GPA would be 6.0 - incredibly whimsical writing here...
~Ben

Chilling...I love a good murder story! I really wasn't expecting Melissa to come out and say what had happened to Alice and her boyfriend..*shivers* it was fantastically unpredictable...
I must comment on the dialog so far - it is so refreshingly great - not many people have enough literacy talent to be able to write engaging dialogs...
I will continue now!
~Ben

I am overjoyed that you have posted this, because it is unlike any other romance fiction I have read in the way that I agree with everything you write about...every feeling...a brilliant piece of fiction such as this is as rare as a pure droplet of unspoilt water, and twice as beautiful. Your description whilst Trinity was "tripping on air" was exhilerating - I honestly felt like I was where she was...
I will read the rest imminently!
~Ben