Wow, that is really good!

I love the first and second stanzas, especially the image of "boys with wings" screaming and shouting.

I would love opinions from a writer like you on my work, it would mean a lot to me.

oh i like it quite alot too.

especially the second stanza.

i like it;

i love the concept.

you have three s's in hiss. i'm not sure if you were dragging it out, or if it was a typo.