Really good story. It has lots of potential so don't lose hope on it and update soon please.

It seems that Francesca has really bad luck, and Gaving seems a little bit different I think his hidding something.

Wow I like this chapter so much, it seems like an interesting story. Good job.

Holy crap! You've got some impressive stuff on here! (This is Amelia, by the way. :D ) I love what you've got going with this story.

You'll have to wait for any constructive criticisms because my stomach is causing a riot for food so...Keep Writing!

Amazing, as per usual. You're pretty much awesome, as you know. I don't need to tell you it again.

hmm, the pot head over golden-boy, lol. Cheetos and laws of the universe, that made me laugh, a lot, lol Great chapter~

kewl, update soon plz.

WOOT! YAY! You already know I love your first chapter, but I'm proud of you for posting it. *Sniff* It's like having my kid go to school for the first time. Molly's off in the world, posting stuff on Fictionpress! ... Anyways, it was awesome. I love Francesca. She's a '** please' kind of character. Now write more!

haha, that was pretty funny. I loved the conga danceing in his eyes line, I cracked up. And thank you, for the shout-out, that was really nice of you. It was a great chapter! Oh and Im really glad you updated so quick, thanks for that.

This is good so far. I wonder if Gavin's the angel and Death's the demon. I'm intrigued.

Love,
curse the stars.

Told you. And it's ** awesome.

This sounds like an awesome story, I definitely see a lot of great potential in it. Your desqription is lovely and I can't wait to see what happens.
Please update soon!
-Snowy Murder

Very intertesting, I loved it.
You have a gift for describing events in a way that keeps the reader focused.

Just be careful with the talking bits. The part where the uncle said, “Don't die, Franny! Please, your mother'll kill me if you croak!”pulled me out of the story and had me thinking about how unrealistic that comment was.

Still enjoyed it though and can't wait for an update!

this sounds really promiecing (I spelt that wrong sorry) But it sounds really great so far! good job