Short & Sweet.Amazing!

Aw, I have been expecting a twist towards the end... ;) Nevertheless, I still like this story very much. Red seems so sweet, so he must have been a wonderful boyfriend.

I thought this was absolutely gorgeous. You really did yourself a disservice when you described your writing to me in the skow PMs.

I thought the two main characters were very well fleshed out. I could feel their love story to each other. I also loved that it read like a letter to a long lost love. There was such sweetness in here. It's remarkable.

I love this perspective...Referring to the guy as "you" is so personal. I like it better than the simple first person. Nice job! :P

I really liked the story, and your style of writing :D Hope you put another one up soon :D

Hiya! It's SuperNinjaPriya, at your service. :)

I absolutely adored this! It was cute and sweet, and while it was predictable, I really enjoyed the style you wrote it in.

There were a few errors though, that I would like to point out. You had some run on sentences and at some parts, the phrasing got a bit awkward.

But overall, awesome job. :)

This is short, simple, and very sweet. The nostalgia adds impact to the end, when he's actually there in person. Overall, it hits the right note of emotion instead of being too heavy and tipping into angsty.

There are a few places where the prose sounds just slightly awkward, either in the phrasing because it's too formal, or in the tense. Since it's written in first person present tense, one or two of the places where it talks about the past sounds vaguely off, but perhaps that's what you were going for.

I think I might like more clarification, too (Is he off at college? Does she sneak into his room often?), but for the most part the lack of detail works.

Overall, very nicely done.

aww...normally i'm not a huge fan of one-shots...i think they end far too quickly and it's not really a whole story, but i really loved this one. it's so sweet!

=D

Aw. That was so sweet. I do like how it's written like she's talking directly to him, it's different and interesting. I loved how he was going to come back to "claim" her. Good job, Carol! :)

This story is so cute. Great job, sweets!

(Sorry, I know you'll be disappointed this review is from me and not someone else exciting - but someone will stumble upon your story! Advertise it at the SKoW forums?)

Julia