nice very nice. i think i might sneek over to ur house and watch south park w/ u.

The beginning is sort of vague. Well, the whole thing is really. vague and suspense is a thin line, my friend. And you're on the 'vague side' a tad bit. ^^
There are also some spelling errors, nothing major, but you should go back and correct them. :]
but this is a nice making for a story. I'll have to check back up on it soon.
~writes down the name of the story and author~
Yours,
-centuriespast