Another great story! I'm looking forward to how this one will progress... :D I caught a few small mistakes that I thought you might want to know about. :)

Chapter 1
"Lizzie accompanied Tim across the street to Panera Bred and found herself telling him everything..." (Shouldn't it be Bread?) Btw, I love the restaurant name...I can just imagine eating there... :)
Chapter 2
"Yes, I have an 11:00 appointment with J-with Mr. Walker." (I wasn't exactly sure was J-with meant. I guessing a typo?)
"My dad helped my dream to take off, but I felt like if I staid, I wouldn't be able to steer it in the direction I wanted it to go." (stayed instead of staid)
"Soar and humiliated though she was, she couldn't help noticing his jet black hair and the way his t-shirt accentuated every muscle of his abdomen." (sore instead of sore)
Chapter 5
"I'm the original captain kluts." (I liked this phrase; it made me laugh. :D But I think you meant klutz instead of kluts.)
Chapter 7
"It was 4:06 in the morning; he'd officially lain in bed counting the miniscule cracks in his sealing for the last three hours." (I'm not 100% sure on this, but I think the verb tense should be laid rather than lain. >.< "Miniscule" is also actually spelled minuscule, and I think you meant ceiling instead of sealing.)
"He closed his eyes, expecting Kayley to meet him on the threshold of his dreams, and found himself instead dancing with Lizzie." (Just a suggestion, but I would phrase the last part of the sentence as "but instead found himself..." I think it makes more sense to move the adverb and to use "but" instead of "and.")
Chapter 9
"Her voice had lost its sweet, honey-toned drawl; now it sounded soft but cool, like steal wrapped in silk." (steel instead of steal)
Chapter 10
"That chance is about the size of the crum on Tim's shirt, but I digress." (crumb instead of crum)
Chapter 11
"Two and a half hours later, Lizzie was standing in the center of Rory's living room, turning on her heal as she took in the framed photographs that lined the walls." (heel instead of heal)

Well anyways, I just thought I'd write that list... :)

I really like Timmy's personality. He seems so much fun to be with and a real encouragement to Lizzie. :D I just noticed one section where I felt like his character had dramatically changed. It's from the section in Chapter 10 where Timmy and Lizzie have pigged out (excuse me for using the expression) on brownies and Chinese takeout. He begins to incorporate an extreme amount of "so" and "oh my gosh" into his language. I imagine him in this part as sort of a valley girl. It was annoying actually. I had previously saw him as a funny if often ridiculous person, but I think this went slightly over the top. Well, I do guess that they were both slightly tipsy from all the wine...two bottles, after all. ;) I know I already mentioned this, but I love the conversations between Timmy and Lizzie. Especially the "Lizzaroni." Hehe. :D

Oh, and Mattie Bloomfield. I hate her already. D: She seems so nasty...poor Lizzie. T.T The part about the mysterious stranger in the corner seems pretty interesting though... I'm looking forward to seeing how you develop that. :) But then again, I'm not sure I want any more of that snobby lady. >.<

And finally, I love how the plot is developing. I'm torn between Lizzie with Rory or James. I don't know if she should go with Rory because he seems like he's not over Kayley yet. And I tend to agree with Timmy on the name. It somehow reminds me of Royal (I think that was his name) in Anne of Green Gables, and that doesn't bode to well for his future. >.< Oh well, he seems to have a really nice personality. And then James. She could still love him, and he could have changed... This is a hard choice. I'm loving it! Keep up the amazing work. :D

Aw, so sad and yet the kiss so perfect.
JM

Well that was certainly and interesting interview and I wonder what was with the man hidden in the book shelves an interesting mystery to add.
JM

lol, the summary was intriguing! Now onto actually reading this...

good chapter.update soon.

This story is great!
Lizzie is a great character and so is Rory.
:)

whoa, she sure told him... lol.

PMS! review mine?

~Katie

i like this update soon

It's really good. The writing, and ideas are fantastic. The spelling and grammer could be a bit better, a few you'res that should have been yours, and staied is spelled stayed, but I really like it.

I've liked this story since you first posted it and I never even knew you took it down. I've noticed that you do that a lot with your stories. Anyway, there's really not much to say. The content was good, but I do think you need that beta.

I'm willing to do that job if you want. I'll definitely fix grammar, layout/style issues, and spelling (though spelling isn't really my strong suit). But I'm willing to give it a try.

And don't worry about lack of reader response/interest. The only thing the majority of people on this website are interested in are the cliched stories that don't deserve all the reviews. Trust me, I barely get reviews as well but I still write because most of the time I'm doing it for me, not the for the people that are reading it, though reviews are nice.

Just keep up the great work.

I like this a lot :]
I love stories about grown women doing their thing.

I have a question though...so she and james broke up 6 months ago, but he left for New York 3 years ago and they had been dating for close to a year...are they in NYC or another town?
I just got a little confused right there.

Other than that Great Job*