Beautiful. In a completely unusual way. This revises the reader's mind, pulling and tugging at universal emotions while being original and giving way to new perspective and insight. I get the feeling that this is intensely personal and must have been difficult to write, but that is exactly what makes it so powerful. One remark though, I wasn't particularly found of the listing "unwanted, brooded, wandered, and showered". It seemed like a cliche image in comparison to the rest of the poem...maybe replace with a stronger image? Anyways, brilliant piece. This has really left a mark on me.

this is incredibl.
a totally different view and concept to take into consideration when thinking of transgenderism.
SLGunn

This is such a poignant poem. I love it. It perfectly captures that painful confusion that one can assume transgendered people experience. I'm not sure if this is fictional or not, but you make it sound like a personal experience. My favorite lines are:

"little pink skirts/are for little girls, and army trucks for little boys/sorry i couldn't fit your lines/your boxes..."

&

"when you are the one to be beaten and molested ... you thought i should be."

I can't express in words how this poem changed my thoughts on transgenderism. Please keep writing.

Wow. This was phenomenal. I loved ... well, I many lines, but especially, "& distraught christmas morning cries one fucked up young lady" and "sorry I couldn't fit your lines, your boxes"

Obviously, the "revealing" line was highly effective - unexpected, and yet understood. I, perhaps stupidly, was a bit confused about hte "boy's bathroom" thing. While your gender isn't unknown, it's kind of blurred - you may want to clarify.

I didn't really like the list "unwanted, brooded, wandered, showered." I think you could find a stronger image to replace the words. :)

Really excellent.

~Effervescent-Sentiments

The subject of the poem is very well conveyed. I love how you had nice imagery to present a person and his/her trials. I do think that some of it was a little hard to relate to. Like in the last part of the poem "Come talk to me about disappointment, frustration, and helplessness" Those lines seemed a little bit out of place. They didn't seem to go with the character you created. I think you should either delete those lines, or tone them down.

I liked the way you formated the last three lines as one word. They made them really stand out. Well done.

amazing as always. the ending really hits home. nice job.

"A pattern of shame." The pain here is profound and heart-wrenching.

"Sorry I couldn't fit your lines, your boxes." This line is full of frustration and angst. It illustrates the downfall of societal gender roles well.

"If I hadn't ask Santa for a penis..." BRILLIANT! MIND-BLOWING! CREATIVE! :D

"Pariah." Nice diction here.

Great work!
-Isca