It feels like you wanted to write this as a play. If that is what you really are trying to do, most of your lines for the Narrator should in fact be stage directions.

If it is not what you wanted to do, it really needs work.

These powers of the "blessed" people, are they genetic, or are they modifications? Where do they come from? Your background seems very fragmented.

The caste system you introduce in the beginning seems to be completely pointless. There is no mention of it in the rest of your story except that those who aren't blessed are shunned.

And how exactly does Jupiter's clean conscious affect others' powers? It seems to be something that sounded like a good idea, and very well could be, but has nothing to support it.