"You rouse up ghosts." This opening line is absolutely divine--a person who intrigues spirits must truly be captivating.

"Let's dream of a new world." The tone of this line is quite powerful--suggesting that lover's, even if not together in reality, can find a way to create 'a new world' of love through dreams or fantasies.

Keep up the good work,
-Isca

I think you went a bit overboard with the ellipses. Especially in that third stanza. Also, in the last line of that stanza it should be "you and me" since it's the object of the preposition with.

However, I did really like that stanza writingwise. All of the nighttime references fit in nicely and it wasn't just a cliched thing about nighttime. Nice job.

I have to say I really liked the first three stanzas, but the rest just wasn't as good to me. Those stanzas had some great descriptions and they were unique.

Switching to cliched things about love was done on purpose, but I didn't really like it. In the second to last stanza the third line is cliched and from that song who'se name I can't think of. But I did like the format there and the rest of the stanza. The last two lines of the last stanza I liked, it was a great change in the mood I think. However, the first two lines were a tad cliched though.

Anyway I think it could be an amazing piece, but even as is it's a really good piece.

I liked the stanza you choosed for your summary- I liked where it was placed; it started giving a closure to the piece.

The first thing I noticed was your format. I hadn't even read any of the poem and I'd already decided that I loved the form. It complimented the words, I think.

The italicized parentheticals were a nice touch, by the way. The rhyme in it was good, too; it wasn't obvious and cheesy.

All in all, this was so wonderful. I can't even start on the word choice. Everything fit the idea so incredibly well. Great job and thank you for posting this! ^_^

"let me count the days `till i won't even remember your face"

wow, that really stuck me.
very good!