'Swiftly flooding corridors closing all escapes.'
The word swiflty throws this off a little for me, but I like the rest of the sentence. It is a nice vibe and start to the poem.
I like the lines about the whistle and the image of the parched throat.
I like the 'Living for two' line because it makes me think of someone pregnant and the deprate plight they can be put in sometimes. The two lines after it though lose my interest because they seem forced.
The last line however is amazing. I love it.
'It’ll be another hour before I stop breathing.'
That is breath taking. (Obviously...)

Areku

(I liked this collection, overall I think I liked it more so then not. You are a good writer.)

'I am ashamed, I should be ashamed,
Am I ashamed?'

I love this repetition. It is brilliant. I have nothing much to say about it besides brilliant. Good work because I normally can't stand too much repetition.

The imagery with the water-clogged ears and bloodstains made this more so eery then I first would have assumed with the first line of the repeated 'go'.

Areku

This was an interesting peice. It made me full of questions, yet I have no clue how to ask them.

The alien invaders part was interesting because I don't know what to think and where to go from there. I also liked your use of the word symphonies. That word makes me smile when used. =)

The line about the fog machines is interesting. I don't like or hate it. It is perfect, yet so odd. I really don't know what to think of it.

I am so intrigued yet so lost on this peice. Good work.

Areku

I like the last three lines of this poem the best.
'The door rattles.
The clothes will spill.
Ready to burst.'
They fit together really well and I like how abrupt they end.

The question asked in the first line set a nice tone. The speaker seems like a scared child wanting to keep the light on, however, also kind of mocking in having to ask the question. It also intrigued me and for some reason caught me off guard.

I did not like the repetition of the words smother and memories. They were only repeated twice, but that seems forced for this poem.

Overall good work.
Areku

I can't find a thing I don't like about this poem.

The use of the word '**' is quite shocking to me. When I read the rest of that line I cocked my head to the side and reread it. I have never seen someone use that word in that sense in a poem on this site.

Next point... 'Skeletons hold their hands and muffle their feet with silk.'
The first have of the sentence gives me a feeling of sadness, yet the second half makes me think of the Chinese binding their feet in their fight for beauty. It gave me mixed meanings and I loved it.

The first two lines of this poem catch me right away. I liked the scared tone the speaker had.

Adding a colour is always good in my books. It tells me what colour to think in. (Well, if that wasn't the most obvious thing I have ever said in a review...)

Overall, AMAZING! Loved it.
Areku

'I want to no part in Death!' I am not sure if you meant to write it that way, because it does not work, but that could be a typo.

This one is not as good as the other ones in my opinion. I find this one quite vague and jumping from idea to idea. I tried to read the whole thing through, but I kept getting distracted by some of the oddities.

However, I did like the beginning few lines because they went together well and were well written. They had a nice ring to them when I read them.

Overall this was an interesting poem.
(Also, I am slowly working through all your poems for reviews because you intrigue me as a writer. =D And if I read it I have to review, because I hate people who hit and don't review...)
Areku

I really like the first three lines of this poem because it shows a disgust and a clear differentiation from this person being spoken about. I like the terror imagery in this peice and the holding of the breath. I like that question 'Will I breathe if I hold my breath?' because it stuck in my mind. I was wondering how someone could ask that as it is silly but I also read a deep regret from this line. I am not sure why, but it was good. I also like the lines about the infection and the cuticles.
Good work.
Areku

I am kind of shocked as to the word 'smother' because one would not want to smother their children as this says. I know that is not what you meant, but it is still not proper in my mind.
The imagery with the dog however was nicely added. I did like that part. The image of a dog listening and the dog sleeping were nice images for this poem.
Areku

I think this chapter has rape in it, or explains a variation of it

I love the way this poem starts - "This is mine." It definitely grabbed my attention. I also love the idea of a "panting fire." Nice personification. Keep writing! :)

I love this whole collection alot.
inspiring and poetically interesting at that
personally specific, but wonderfully able to be related to.
I have no cirique, for the poems are really great to me.
I keep rereading the third line, i love watching the meaning shift. And course your ever poignant ending lines. you are one of the few on this site, or anywhere, that is uniquely talented. something different than anyone else. your work sits just as highly as all my favorite authors, for you are one. Thank you for sharing your talent. (sorry for reviews longer than the poem =] )

This poem reminds me of a dog I used to have. Review my story.

Your poetry poseses the wonder eloquent true grit of life
the unfiltered expression
that becomes so beautiful
as all always the last three lines made this for me.
i love your writing as much as my favorite authors
(beatnick poets/novelists, keroauc, ginsberg, etc. fyi)
I would love to have this collection contained in a book on my shelf.

I love you and your writing.

"Lean your head back, it'll clear your system." MIND-BLOWING! I don't even know what to say...this line has rendered me speechless...

"It'll be another hour before I stop breathing." BRILLIANT ENDING!

"I should be ashamed." I like how the speaker knows that he should feel ashamed for his actions, but doesn't. It's very realistic.

"A selfish reminder." Good final line!