Amazing...that nearly made me cry, its so simple and confusing at the same time. Lost, lonely, desperate but at the same time content and happy. Sort but sweet! Thx for writting. I know little about poetry so i cant give constructive critisisum.

I loved this line the most: 'You know I dance destruction, fire bright tears and strangled cries and shuddered fears' because it hurts so much. I feel something dip inside me and just oh, oh, oh. It's so beautiful what that line seems to say. And although I loved the entire piece this just strikes me the hardest for some reason and I love it. I just can't tell you how much that line makes me feel.

And really, I don't know what you were trying to say but this was just beautiful. The ending was a surprise but the entire piece was so powerful. I really, truly loved this. It is exactly what I was looking to feel tonight. Thank-you.

You captured a very desperate, rushing emotion quite nicely and consistently throughout the entire poem. The last line was extremely unexpected, but a fitting ending to the poem.

The only suggestion I can think of is perhaps playing and experimenting with enjambment a bit...? I notice that many of the lines in the poem end at a stopping/pausing punctuation or at the completion of a segment of thought. Perhaps instead, with some of the longer lines, you could cut off the line somewhere in the middle and continue the thought at the following line so as to lead the reader quickly through the thought to imitate this rushing mood. (Sorry that was a long sentence, and probably completely confusing...but anyway just a suggestion, and I certainly like what you already have here...)

You have some great imagery and phrases - specifically "lights that dim and wane," "of losing ground and anchor," "keep me calm," and "armoured silence."

Some of the phrases also convey a great sense of bitterness (unless I'm reading too much into them). And the way the poem is speaking right to the reader makes the poem more personal and meaningful.

Anyway, great job with the poem. The imagery and style are both excellent.

You get a cat smile. ^_^.

I saw the poem's dance in my head and felt it too. Good Job.

i really liked this. the 'drug me under' bit was really vivid, and the imagery throughout was really wonderful...very genuine and 'real', hah.

~Katie

Oh, this is darling. I've always loved your stuff but I have a special spot for poetry.

I liked these lines: the third line where it says "this has been over so many times;" the line with the touch; the "ghosts of real" and "Somehow I am happy;" the "small praise" and the blame. I liked the silent fear and insecurity, and the way these two become an undeserved, vitriolic outpour. I liked the conflicts within this poem-- the voice and the listener, and the internal struggle.

I'd like to say more, but poetry is always so personal for both the reader and the writer. It's awkward trying to bridge the gap between what I, the reader, took away from this and what the writer, you, invested in it. It's beautiful all the same and while the meaning might not translate, the emotion certainly does.