love your formatting, the main poem plus the lines to the right. and the graphic, emotional face of this. the words have power, even through the hurt, and it shows... - it cuts.

"much, but really, you're just trying mend a wound"
--trying *to* mend, i think you meant.

superb work.

There's a lot of emothion behind this piece, for sure. I like that, because the poem is therefore more believable.

The formatting was interesting and held my attention. I would love to see more work in this style.

The displacement worked flawlessly, I loved it; it didn't draw away from the flow. The imagery was affective, powerful. Good job =]

God, that was a good poem. The wound is my favourite part, and a close second is the x on her back. The poem got under the skin of the love-hate, and the confusion.

Keep writing!

Janna

Wow. That was very good, I really enjoyed it. I loved the structure & how it spelled out, "sometimes i ** hate you." The imagery was great. But, I do think you could have capitalized the I's. Overall, great job.

Ace.
:)

Very good, old or not. I love it.