 frogs of war 2009-02-19 . chapter 1Great as always. I hope the last line didn't mean an orgy. I not sure Greg's the type to share. But I guess we know know what he looks for in an intern.
"...and finally to his fellow interns-prospectives. Finally, after... he finally turned his..." Three "finally"s in a row.
And who is this he? "He initially only glanced at him" Was the man staring at Main the entire time and Main was looking around? or did the man glance at Main before staring a him?
"unsure as too where they were going." to
Two "Ina"s instead of Ian
"he stripped off his own business suit which he wore the entire time" I'm not sure the "which he wore the entire time" is necessary.
(Sorry if I seem ** you sometimes, but that last story made me come up with not one but two stories about boys with their mother's boyfriend — one was live-in and in the other boy was fairly young, both squicky — plus a boy "sacrificed" to a dragon.) I wonder what this one will make me come up with. |