I'm SO confused. I didn't read the original story, so I don't really know what's going on.

I like your writing style. The way you portrayed the very first scene with the wolf pack and the elk was beautiful. You captured the emotion marvelously. I loved it.

The only error I found in the whole thing was in the first line. "The moon had almost reached it’s zenith in the sky." Delete the apostrophe. It shouldn't be used as a contraction; it should be in the possessive form.

I don't know if this is the prologue or the first chapter. It seems prologue-esque to me, but I could be wrong. My only concern is the flow, not necessarily the pacing, of the scenes following the elk scene. There's just so much to take in; it makes the whole thing seem a little choppy. I thought it might have been just a little too rushed.

However, I think this was very impressive and I believe you have talent and potential. I will be eagerly awaiting the development of this piece.