Hey chica...you're welcome! Glad I could be there through the creative process!!

This is stuff I don't remember reading so here goes my review.

I'm not sure whether this is a glitch with quick edit or what but: "thinking, Wow." There is no quotations; no italics and capitalized ??

Other than that...wow, what a chapter. I never thought that K would come out of his shell so far that he would actually ask her for her hand/date. Surprised the hell out of me.

And I'm sorry but Leah is a C**ktease and a b**ch to be stringing him along like that merely because she knows she can...

WHAT THE HECK!

I know she has her reasons...but man what a roller coaster for K...it just isn't fair to his already frail emotional state!

I know I'm not a guy, but I don't have any issue with the way that K acts. It's masculine enough that there should be no mistakes. I've known guys my whole life who lived on that fringe.

So far so good Chica! Keep it up. I know how frantic the time is for you, so...that you're getting any kind of creative work done is a boon to me!

And you're going back to work? When did you guys make that decision? I wish you luck...

Lots of hugs and kisses!

I'll be visiting DR very shortly to flood you with reviews there too!!

Heya! Well now, That last review of mine might have come through as anony...or two...yikes...

I didn't realize I wasn't signed in still!

Okay moving right along! Another great entry. I really feel sorry for K every time I read this, even when I know half of this mess is his own fault. Too bad he doesn't know that girls don't always say what they mean!

Chappie two!

Having an "in" on this story I have an idea what Jude's talking about at the end.

Your execution on storytelling has gotten way sharp as late. I love it!

Keep it up girl you rock!

I remember reading this, I don't think it was this polished yet, but I really love the revamp. I especially like the webcomicking touch you threw in there with DD and CG...and the like!

You've got a really good handle on the first person speaker here as well.

Lovely!

Off to read the next chapter!

“Dude, are you gay?” I asked. -- Ahahah, exactly what I was wondering. Not that his attire means he is or anything. ;-)

“Tell her,” he suggested. -- Yeah, as if it's that easy.

“Could you use this one, darling?” Jude asked, his accent clearer than I had heard it in a long time. -- He's totally using that to his advantage. Sneaky...

Slurping his soup on purpose to annoy the cheerleaders sitting next to us -- Nice.

Twitch and Rohit aren’t taking them because they’re juniors. -- I totally took the SAT as a junior. Figured if I scored high enough (and I did), that'd be one less stressful thing to worry about as a senior. Why not, right? Uh, not that this has anything to do with the story... lol.

“Make sure she comes,” he said. -- Ouch!

This was a good chapter. Not a lot happened, but it was important for fleshing out the characters. And I do like the characters so far. :-) More, please!

Ok, so I'm not going to do individual chappy reviews b/c I'm too lazy! :) I like this reversion, though. The story translates just as well to a modern setting as to a futuristic one. Poor K is still as clueless as ever. Dear boy. I'm enjoying it so far and I can't believe you find the oomph to write with a new baby. I was a zombie for at least 6 months...LOL

hm awesome story! :) I'm a girl, so I csn't tell you if he sounds like a girl, but he can sound like a girl if he wants, hes insecure, right?
-christina

Why are you typing everyting single-handed? i could never do that - I touchtype so both my hands are important.
Anyways, this chapter was pretty good. I read on your profile that you need help on this story so here it is:
Have you thought of the aim of this story? What is happeneing? Preferably you have already got a story plot in your head. If so, write it out and for each sentence expand it as your chapter. So then you have a aim for each chapter (you won't have any 'filler' chapters then). I hope this helps.
Narq.

You stated "I am a light sleeper." Therefore you didn't have to describe it. "In between the initial pfft sound my alarm made as it powered up and the radio actually coming on, I opened my eyes." Personally, I think one of those would be enough or you'd be saying the same thing twice.
This is a good chapter overall and I'm going to look at the next chapter.

Okay, now I feel really bad for taking so long to review your things, considering you just had a baby and *still* managed to review my last three chapters of Executioners (thanks, btw!). :-P

So here is me attempting to do one in the 20 minutes I have before work. I'll try to hit the other one later tonight.

The yellow lines in the otherwise black-and-white plaid shone like neon in the gray, gloomy day. -- Oh, nice detail. I can totally visualize that.

The second voice, Laine, spoke. “Seems a shame, huh? I heard he’s a real dunce, but I wouldn’t mind keeping him around the house for a few years.” -- Ouch! I already don't like that girl.

I don't know what you have planned for this story, but he should totally start going out with someone to make Leah jealous. :-P I did that as a story plot a few stories back, and it was fun. LOL.

Also, how dumb are they for talking loud enough for him to hear the entire conversation. Jeez... :-P

“Neale will be there. Please go with me. I don’t want to go alone.” -- Wow, harsh, Leah. She better end up with him in the end, or that's just cruel. lol.

Well, at least she's trying to talk him into college. That's always a good thing. :-)

M, I still like it. It's picking up now that you're getting past the intros. Can't wait to see where you take it. K's likable, though Leah so far seems kind of ... not that nice. lol. I know, I know, she doesn't know how he feels. But still...

Hope you're having a great time with your new kid!

I'd say this is quite original - I haven't seen anything like this before!
Nice!

Heyo there! me again if ya remember. :) Anyway, sorry for being so late in reviewing. Too many stuff to review here. :S Anyway, it really seems that there is really some form of chemistry going on between the three characters here. I truly wonder if Jude likes Leah. I don't know why, but I've got a gut feeling along that line. Also I wonder how Kiryn is going to make his feelings known to Leah as well. Maybe I could see a rejection sad ending for this story. I don't know tbh. All in all nothing to suggest here. And yeah, thanks very much for your review on A Ranger's Tale. Hope to see more of the reviews for it soon! ^^ Also best of luck to your future kid. Hope your family will lit up even more after that little dude comes out into the world. :)

This is great! Your characters are interesting and well-developed, the kind that really suck you into the story. I find Jude, especially, very likable. Your grammar and spelling are well-written, so the story flows smoothly. I like it so far...can't wait for more!

P.S. - I think it's so cute that you're pregnant (:

Sorry I'm a bit slow getting to this. :-P I have a bad habit of seeing something's updated or that I have a message, and setting it aside to get to later. Then promptly forgetting about it for a few days.

Anyway, I just have to comment again on how well you write. Everything is technically correct (which I love), and I love your word choices. They're very descriptive and precise. No "It was rainy. He was wet" here.

I can tell you're very good at characters. While it feels as if this is taking its time getting going plotwise, the characters and their interactions feel very real and natural. They're three-dimensional and have a history, which is great.

I can't wait till we start to see some real conflict! :-)