your writing is everything i wish i could be. it is an inspiration.

"and mend the rage splitting at the seems."... seams

I like the repetition it worked well. I might've separated it into stanzas to emphasize it a bit more, thought. I like your descriptions as well they are really unique and well done. I especially liked the second want.

The only thing is "and make this make some sense." When I read that line out loud it just sounded awkward. Maybe "and make some sense of this" would be better? The repetition of make I think is what sounded odd.

Other than that really great job.

This is eerie and fantastic and wonderful.

i can relate, so much. beautiful as always.

This is very depressing... but well written! Adding you to my fav authors...

"While the spider webs sleep." You took the creepy 'crawling spider' imagery, and turned it into something beautiful and dream-like. :)

"To pile the mound of swirling hurt." The words here are very emotionally vivid.

"And not ever have to feel a shred of this." This final line is heart-wrenching.

Great work!
-Isca

nice.

this is pure beauty.