Well that was a little quick, huh?
She's already in a state because of her mother and there he's like :HimynameisbobandImyourfather
It's a littel insensitive, no?
x reeka

omg. dude! update please!! i love dumb blonde jokes. i dont actually believe blondes are dumb but they are still funny. update soon!

Oh. My. God. SO hooked! Update!
Love,
Aly

Hihi!

Guess who?

XD

I really like your story. This chapter was a good mix; it had a darker tone but still had its funny moments. I also like the pace- even though it was more serious you didn’t like the action fall flat, bravo. Nice cliffy btw. I eagerly await an update. So, so, do et already. I shall pester joo until you bow to my whims and update. muwhahahahahaha

aw, no hot boys in this chapter. :( lmao, i hope they come out soon. and wow! her dad came out. wonder how he's going to explain where he's been all her life. and whoa, crazy. what about the lady that died in the car? wonder what is going to happen with her...

sucks that the mom's in a coma, but i can't wait for more! please update soon! i want to see her and cole interacting very soon! oh and her (half?) sister? will they get along or judging by the convo... no? lmao. OK OK ill stop asking about it. please update soon!!

lmao. i loved the blonde jokes. ^-^ and leighton sounds so hot! jerkish, but hot, haha. cole seems dark, but cool. i hope we get to see more of him. hm, i thought the pace of the story was ok. not to fast, not too slow. hope her mom turns out OK, though. :( anyway, i like how the character sounds! so keep it up. maybe add more description for the main, though. i can't really picture her in my head, at the moment. well, lmao, aside from the blonde hair of course. ;P

omg dude
cant wait for more
hope you update soon
--ifly*hugs*

Love the ending. Lol. "Luke, I am your father." *makes breathing noises* XD

Chapter was great. I enjoyed seeing how Arianne was characterized through this whole trauma/situation with her mom.

I'm even more excited to see what will happen with Arianne and Cole. :) You must bring him back for the next chapter.

And as always, keep writing!

i loved it. i like how you slipped the character descriptions in without bing too deliberate, cause i hate it when that happens. it can really spoil the flow of a story. it was funny and exciting and i can't wait for the next chapter. hurry hurry hurry! :)

I /knew/ it was the mum! Me sho shmart. (grin)

I likey! True, at first, I was confused. I thought the girl was being called Cole. :S

Lemme explain: I do get it now, but I think you might be able to make that clearer.
"The dry retort Arianne could hear left her smug that this Cole was raining down on this so-called Leighton's party."

But maybe that's just me? XP

Coolies.

I wish that Ari had a stronger personality. She kind of sounds like slutty to me, but it was deleted when you said that she's not a social butterfly.

I love family rivalry. I love the blonde jokes! XD And I love Cole, as well. But since Arianne is so likable, she can have him. I will steal Leighton instead. :)

It's a great first chapter. :D And I'm excited to see what happens next. Mostly with Cole and Arianne. I'm jumping out of my pants/pjs/whatever waiting for their next encounter. ;D

Lol, I know you say this is a new writing style for you, but I'm really enjoying it. Keep it up!