|Reviews for Acceptance|
| I see London I see Sam's Town 3/10/09 . chapter 1
"The way I jiggle my behind?"
This is such a classic line! I giggled, and it's one of my favorite lines in your poem. However, the poem is at a bit of a disadvantage, because acceptance is a slightly overdone topic-doesn't make it bad, though! I honestly think that your poem could do without the repetitive lines of "acceptance." Rather than just writing the word down, it would be better if you showed your readers this notion and yearning for acceptance through your words, lacing them together to create meaning from imagery and detail. This can be accomplished if instead of writing "I have a unique walk" or "I laugh like an angel," show us rather than tell us through these similes. An example being: create a sound you want us to associate your laugh with, and an image as to how you walk, exactly. With that, this poem-of you choose to edit and revise, or just apply this to future poems, I think your writing will be much stronger than it is right now!
Happy writing JV :)