Whoa, whoa, whoa. Maybe this stuff gets explained later on, but as for right now, its all very confusing.

There's far too much information tossed out and the reader has no idea what's going on. Its some weird style that I've seen some authors do, but you should try to explain immediately afterward. You dropped the reader into the midst of things with no knowledge of anything (something that might work with a good hook, but there wasn't really one in this). Who are the Clans, where's this desert, etc.

And you use a passive description at times. You're better at "show don't tell", but it's still strange when you say:
"Raven ignored the punch to his side and Anne’s comment of being ‘right there’ and continued."

That just...doesn't work really. It'd be better to just come out and say what happened.

Otherwise, I loved your choice of words. And it seemed as if you have a lot of ground laid out from the get go. It'd just be nicer if the reader knew a bit more about what was going on instead of being dumped in a desert.

Those poor kids. :( It almost broke my heart to read about that terrible orphanage.

Nice descritpions of it though. I, as a reader, could sense the fear and disgust and sadness all at once. Good job.

~nicola

Another great chapter. I think I have a vauge idea of things so I'm just gonna stick with this story for now instead of reading any of the previous ones.

I like how the mission turned out against Anne's favor. lol
:D

~nicola

This is interesting though I am a tad bit confused. Perhaps this is part of a series? If so, I would like to read the other instalments. Do continue this. :D

~nicola