This poem is so beautiful and sincere... I almost cried with all the deep lines you wrote...

Now my eyes fill with tears

but 'stead of crying,

I'll just whisper goodbye

before I break in pieces.

This line is so beautiful, I love it, and this whole poem.

i guess i'm like that with my dad too...

are you born in china?

some parts in the poem do not run smoothly, and maybe a grammatical error, but otherwise it's great.

You have a very good way with words, I must say. When I was reading this I almost cried because it made me think of my father so far away. Keep it up.

Now we're on to daughter, that's nice.

"A world where noone needs her,"... no one

I think alone shouldn't be capitalized, but other than that I like the piece. It works well, with the other pieces. Nice job.

"These thoughts drive me crazy badly".. I'm not sure what you meant by crazy badly, but it sounds really awkward. Maybe very crazy?

The beginning was a bit confusing paradise is what place? Where is there in the third stanza?

The piece itself is good. I like how we switched from Father to Mother, that was nice. The way the eye thing and the breathe thing works well together.

Heartfelt is one word.

Again is this still about the dad?

I think the repetition is too much here. I would get rid of the first two lines of all the stanzas where the first two and second two are the same. I do like the repetition of I want to know why though. That works nice to tie it all together. I also like all the things you want to know. They're very relateable.

"I want the rain starts to fall,"... "I want the read to start falling"

The only thing about this piece is I'm not 100% sure how it fits into this collection. Is it still about the father? I might add an a/n or something.

The piece itself is nice. I think you ask a lot of really ggreat questions.

"the tongue gets tied"... I think My tongue would fit better with the other lines.

"we began to get apart."... drift apart is a more common phrase

"I Kneeled down and I cried"... knelt (also lowercase k)

I like this. A lot of your comparisons are really great (dream vs reality and moon and sun). The emotion here was also really great. You captured the mixed emotion well.

"Breathe in, Breathe out, It still hurts." I like how you show the reader that a stress-reductive exercise doesn't really take any of the emotional pain away from the situation.

Du musst nicht trotzdem stark sein, sondern weil dein Herz schwer ist!

Schön umgesetzt, wie immer!

"I want you to leave me quietly

but I don't want you to leave me soon,

so stay with me no matter if it hurts,"

I loved that.

I liked this poem because there was alot of emotion in it, even though it was only 4 lines. Beautiful work throughout the whole poem.

I like how the chapters are family members, like father, mother daughter...I also liked how heartbreaking this one was

I liked this one alot