you really shine with the last two stanzas of this poem, especially the last. I didn't think it would be as strong at first, and then at the end it really left a good impression.

I have read a handful of your work and i am more of a fan with each word i read. This one is not as strong as you others but the imagry in none the less beautiful. I love the feeling of loneliness and bordom that shines through in this poem. well done

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interesting poem; simple language but kind of cryptic at the same time.

you have really great imagery/descriptions like "and dismally breathing smoke like a/dead candle with a waxy sweat." very nicely written, and love the word choice

the ending was concise and ends the poem perfectly :]