i love this poem! it's totally rhyme!

was this about someone? cause it felt like it was really really genuine, it was amazing

Its lovely, really, but I think (the crazy girl thinks,) that it would be more effective if you rhymed every second line apposed to line a. with line b.
Instead I would have line a. rhyme with line c. and line b. with line d.
(But this is my opinion and you can shun it and say that its crap if you really want to! I wont take offence.)
Despite the fact that Ive just rambled for yonks about nothing really but critisisment, I still really liked it :)

it's kinda sad. I like it though, and how it rhymed as well.