Another vamp story great =/
Sorry but I thought u would hav had more creative ideas
But yeah I know how a writer's block is sadly

Oh, excitement increases! Who is it? (fingers crossed for Demitri)

I like it, but you might want to spellcheck or something.

I wonder what he's gunna do to Luna...
Omg I can't believe you threw in random dancing
And everyone went along with it
Especially Luna who just woke up from passing out lol

Whoa, I'm really sorry for saying this,
But I spotted quite a bit of mistakes,
I'm guessing you didn't really proof read
And you should probably take the bold and underline out
Of the chapter...
Other then that,
I love love LOVED It!
It's like finally, but now they
Are so going to be embarrassed,
But who could blame them? LOL

P.s.- sorry for the critique

Aw he's hyper
Because he's in love

Thanks for the shoutout!!

*Gasp*
They kissed yay!


Btw it's 1am hur
And I'm like wide-eyed and happy
Bc you updated your story
Which thankfully you do a lot of =D

I don't mind
As long as ur writing
Y am I to complain? =D

Whoa they were all yay in the beginning...
I like the name Luna n demitri
That boy is gunna melt my heart when I hear the story about his life
I can gurantee(sp?) you


Oh wat kinda socks?

I like the story in a way, but I don't like the characters. Demitri's sort of overdone. "Emo" shouldn't be used as a term to describe him. It is demeaning, you see. Emo is not a real word. No one knows what it REALLY means, as there is no real definition. Maybe you should just describe him as a bitter person in dark clothes. I'm one of those, but I'm not emo, per se, because there is no real definition. Also, Goth shouldn't be used, as the Gothic era took place hundreds of years ago and is known for the amazing architecture. Also... crap, I can't remember her name, but the female protagonist is sort of shallow. "My kind of people" is how most preppy, girly girls try and find friends. She should've at least tried to branch out.

I absolutely hated the way you used Japanese words in an English conversation. It seems like an Anime-obsessed 11-year-old is writing this, and I don't like it. Maybe they could use something more practical, like French of Spanish. How many people do you know that aren't Japanese speak Japanese? It's a hard language to grasp; you shouldn't just use random words in conversation. It's frowned upon, and it sounds stupid.

I like your writing style, though. It's pretty cool. Practice makes perfect... Well, nearly perfect. Nobody's PERFECT perfect. Well, I- ANYWAY! Keep writing, dood.
Cheers.

~Waltzing in the Rain

Oh ahaha
It's not
I thought for a sec Luna was a boy
Sorry I had a moment there
Maybe because it's almost 12 n I'm still up
Any who plz write more
And don't laugh at my mistake
Ohh what am I kidding
You probably r

The title reminds me of a linkin park song
And is this a slash story?
Just wondering
Sorry if I jumped to cunclusions(sp?)