This story can progress into something amazing. Good job. I hope you update soon!

You have a ** load of mistakes. FIX THEM! Or else I'll go after you with a chainsaw, "Charlie the Magical Unicorn." Oh yeah! I went there! Plus, I thought I was the one who got my characters raped! YOU STOLE MY IDEA! You're an **, "Allistare." And, ah, another romance fic... /vomits/
~Your true friend, "Grey"

Wow, "Allistare," you actually got a review for this pathetic piece of crap you call a "story."
~Your bitchy, angst-ridden friend "Grey"

OME!! ME LOVES IT!! U BETTER UPDATE SOON!!