Right!... Hehe!... ;)...

I LOVE the last stanza the most!... "We just love the darkness 'cause we see nothing, we feel everything... We're blind in this painless world."...

It's so perfect in its simplicity!... D

"That's deep man!" - Who knows who said that...

Kinda depressing in a good way that makes you think about it late into the night only to finale realize what it truly means at 1 am while humming show tunes under you covers. Yea... don't question the methods! :P

Great poem though!

Phrasing here is awkward "if I have no one wing."... "if I don't have a wing" sounds better. Same thing in the second stanza. Also, in the second stanza I don't get why you couldn't tun without a wing...

I did like the idea here. It was really interesting and I think the third stanza was especially great.

OMG I love written things about birds...I liked your line, " We just love the darkness 'cause we see nothing, we feel everything...we're blind in this painless world," Gorgeous line and you put the way I see certain things in this world. Thanks so much for review on "One Day."

"We go on." Good message.

"We're blind in this painless world." Profound.

But when the rain falls.../We fall too...Like that angel. — Amazing. I love your newest work. It is truly amazing! *lael1bologna*

Again very strong images!

:-)

I liked it! It was very beautiful and expresive!