Oh...How traumatic...

I feel so sorry for her, for what she's had to endure. I can totally see how losing someone like that would affect simple things like driving and traffic.

The part about the funeral was moving, and sad. That she'll never sing again is very sad indeed!

Great revision...I'm truly looking forward to more from you!

Keep up the great work!

O more stuff I've not read. I like how you've more firmly established that this isn't the same world as that in the first chapter. The Hordeling thing piqued my interest as well as the immediate descriptive of the demons wandering through the club. Nicely played.

Meh? There's humans in this version? Oh how intriguing!!

LMAO! "baobhan sith" Insert thyself! Great stuff! So I know what a succubus is, and of COURSE I know what a Vampire is, but what is a Baobhan sith? *finds Google and goes on a search* OH! How interesting! I learned something new today! Nice!

O Kai is much more jaded than his previous incarnation. He even realizes that he's not in love, and his fiancee is not in love with him either.

Very good, very very good! I love it!

*Ignores A/N's*

*Whistles* hoping that I wasn't contributing to your survival technique during that time! I loved being there...LOL!

Take care and I'll be back to finish up what you have so far!!

"White-skinned Anna liked to think of herself as a lone marshmallow floating in all the chocolatey goodness." OMG! I was giggling so hard at this entire passage, but this last line had me LOL'ing! GREAT visuals!

BTW I don't remember reading this part - ever. So far a nice addition! (I'm reading and reviewing in tandem).

Okay I remember the second half of this, but not this concisely written.

I know this is just a pass through, but no eye hazards. The description is brilliant as only you know how to be, much more polished and detailed than I've managed even now.

Great work, I'm looking forward to what you've decided to do to lighten this up. Though I did love the previous version...

Eh, what can I say I'm a sucker for your writing period!

I really should be doing my work, but I was looking forward to reading your new chapter, so I'm doing that first instead. Hah! I'm such a slacker (but then, weekends are slow).

Ugh, I hate car accidents. They're so nerve-wracking. Especially when the person whose fault it is gets out and starts yelling at you, whose fault it is not. :-P

She must have spaced out at the tail end of the painfully familiar drive again. -- I have a bad habit of doing that, spacing out while I drive. I'll get home and realize I don't really remember getting there. Should probably quit that. lol.

Man, what a jerk. He deserves more damage to his car. :-P She should start carrying a sledgehammer with her for incidents like this. Hah.

... they parted with a mutual desire of never seeing each other again. -- Which pretty much assures they *will* see each other again. :-P Maybe he gets eaten by a demon? (that's me being hopeful, mahaha)

The driver of the eighteen-wheeler coming up behind the Jeep didn’t see the stalled vehicle through the whiteout conditions. -- Yikes! What a way to go...

“y,” she typed. “sry b rite there” -- Ugh, I hate text shortening. :-P When I text, I still insist on spelling out everything. Drives me crazy. Hehe.

It was the last time she sang in front of anybody. -- Aww...

Hmm, wonder what's up with Livy. And that would be really hard driving around after both Eddie's death and getting in an accident.

Alright, lots of subtle but effective backstory going on in this chapter. I'm looking forward to the next one! I can't wait to see how you merge the two worlds and what happens when the characters meet. I bet it'll be interesting! I'm curious what role the rich car-accident jerk will play.

Hello dear! :) I'm so glad you've revived this story. Anna is a lot like I remember. Kai is a lot different, but very interesting. I like the flashbacks to Eddie. It makes the story a lot more rich. Good work!

Congratulations, I still remember those times...
Your story seems very promising. I love stories about soulmates and this one has interesting plot and is very readable. I hope you will be able to update soon.

I loved the way you described your characters... very vivid.

I'm glad you re-wrote it. It's very nice. Stories are very good when people rewrite it because when the writer looks through his/her story again after a period of time they see some stuff they hadn't seen before. I wonder what this story will turn out to be, it's been pretty interesting so far!
Narq.

Another story I am going to enjoy. It is always a gift to find a story you look forward to. Update soon, please.

Okay, I"m finally catching up on this one. :-)

Weird. This is the second FP story I've read lately that had a character named Kai. And, both Kais are supernatural. (The other's in Illusoire by Kendal. It's on my favorite stories list. You should check it out; it's really well done -- not that she needs any more reviews. ;-)) I do love that name, though.

Death meant little to the people in this nightclub. If anything, it enhanced the atmosphere. -- love that line!

Kinda wonder who Lani is, but obviously Kai's going to end up with Anna. Just that kind of story. Well, it could be a tragic story. That isn't apparent yet. Either way, he already admitted he doesn't love Lani. Still, wonder what she is.

Konani’s snout appeared first, nostrils flared to catch a whiff of the air, but with a disgruntled chirp the dragon clambered out of his pocket, ruby claws digging into his skin as it settled in his palm. - Aw, cute!! I want one! lol. Though I keep reading his name as Konami, the video game publisher. :-P

Yay demons! I'm so glad the demon in the title was literal. I *love* supernatural stories! lol. And you wrote this whole chapter very well, with vivid descriptions and great character actions. Love it! :-D

Lol on you doing a reviewer shout out. Never thought I would see another one after so long. Wonder when will it be my turn lol! :D Anyway, interesting chapter here which combines filler with character exploration. I do find Kai's character rather interesting to say the least. However, I'd prefer it if you did a more detailed insight on it. I think it's more like a teaser than a real insght.

As for the description, I think you can actually do more on it from the demons' aspect since you didn't really do anything concrete here. For example, you might want to let the reader visualize what a baobhan sith looks like. Or even the named characters here including Kai. Apart from that, nothing much to say. Thanks very much for your reviews on A Ranger's Tale all the while and hope to see more of them soon! ^^ Bye! :)

D'aww, thankee. I feel honoured.

So, wow. Interesting change of scene. I like the setting; is it meant to be like a '20s speakeasy type of a place? Because the style of dress described just screams '20s at me, which is pretty cool, actually, because a lot of the time when there's a demon's world the time period is either switched way back to the middle ages, or else it's modern.
Poor Kai. [Neither woman loved him.] That just sucks. I mean, it's not like he loves either of them anyway, but still. [part of him grieved over something he’d never experienced.] That's sad. But I love how he loves storms. I love storms too, actually. And rain in general. I go out and dance in it. But anyway, I can relate. [Kai longed to be under the storm, seeing, smelling, and feeling nothing except the stinging rain, thunderous growls, and flashes of pure power.] That's a nice sentence, too. It kind of gives me goosebumps; the description is beautiful.

Kanoni makes me smile, probably just because he's a little dragon and I have a weakness for dragons, especially little ones.

And just like last time, I didn't see any errors. Seriously, I think I need to build a shrine to you. There's /aways/ mistakes in my writing, and I never manage to catch them.

I can't wait to find out how this will be connected to the first chapter. Update soon!

Herro there! New reviewer here. :) Well, I can see that this is a good chapter for starters. I like the way you did Anna's character and her past. In fact it did well to pave the way for tons of possible developments character wise. If there's anything I can suggest here, I guess maybe you can do some flashbacks on Eddie's death to make Anna's feelings more realistic. :) Apart from that, nothing much to say. Anyway, if you want to review me back which I truly hope so, then I hope you can start with A Ranger's Tale since it's my first shot at doing an anti-hero main and I will like some input on it. :)

Oh! I didn't realize you'd put another story up, even though your profile said another was coming. Oops. :-P I would have read it sooner if I'd realized.

Crumb? Who says that? Nobody where I am, anyway. LOL.

"But that, of course, had been before the accident. Before Eddie died." -- Whoa! Way to pull a twist right in the first chapter! (unless it was in the summary, which I didn't read because I don't like to spoil myself. :-P) I certainly didn't expect it.

I admit, since I didn't read the summary, I hoped for some demon slaying in this. LOL. But now I see they're going to be psychological demons. Which is okay, too. :-)

I'd like to see what happens next and where you go with this. And I'll pay more attention to when you update next time.

I would like to say that I enjoyed reading this, you put in just the right amount of details in the girls feelings to make me feel sad like her, nice job. I enjoyed the plot line to it so far and hope you can put on something to continue it. Please try..