Well I don't know if it's me or is it a fact that this story could be nearing the end. Ah well, guess I can only wait. ;) Anyway, good description as always here. I really like the dark tone of this story like the rest. Anyway, the state of heat I'm having now is impairing my ability to type a decent review, so erm yeah, sorry if some of what I've said don't make sense. :S Ok, firstly I do see a heavy touch of negative atheism here. Don't know if it's your stance on religion. As for the existence of Velsing and Glordiana, I think that they might have something to do with the bigger picture of your story's world rather than just a simple case of personal agenda. AS for CCs, well to be frank my current state of sweating due to the insane heat over here in S'pore really screwed my brain. So erm yeah. Nothing to offer for now. Anyway, just a bit of question here: did you received my reply to your latest review on Circles of Arven? I truly hope you do. :)

Aww, you were doing so well! At least you got a good amount done recently!
In the fourth paragraph: "He could smell it—sharp, derisive in his nose—just as he could sense the woman's like snuffing out like a candle's glowing flame." its "life", not "like".
"Behind the red-draped windows were only strips of unmoving blackness that moved softly in the wind as if the monstrosity called a church could breathe." A bit of a contradiction, you say "unmoving" then you describe it as moving in the wind.
Interesting conclusion to the chapter. I'm eager to know what the connection is to all three of them. I like the idea of almost another person taking control of Rufious' body. I wonder if the place he is going to suggest will be another link between them. Good job, nothing stands out except for a few more little typos and such.

You've got brilliant lines. Just lines that whether describing a place or action are just well stated and sound smoothly. I love Adrian's inner battle, it's very interesting and well touched on within the writing. I look forward to the next update, whenever it is, =]

You might want to say something about how/why she doesn't know who has her. I was wondering how someone could have her, but not know who it is, until you said about her eyes being closed while she was doing all that thinking about Vallan, etc. You also talk about Geroe's warehouse, but she isn't in Geroe's warehouse, but by the river.
I think you mean no worse, instead of better: "a wildcat's teeth in her throat was no better than a bounty hunter's blade."
If she was thrown over his shoulder, her head would be around his lower back, not his shoulder. Most likely (unless her arms were bound), they would be swaying limply on either side of her head and he would have a hold of her legs. She also wouldn't be able to see very much, unless she tilted her head to the side and then only bits and pieces as her arms bounced out of the way (if she doesn't want to alert the person that she is awake, she wouldn't want to move much). You might want to go into more detail about those details, to give a better picture of her predicament.
While the little tidbit about no grass in the city was a nice little fact and hings like that really gives the story personality, she would probably notice the man before the grass on the ground. After all, after living on the streets, you always need to be on the lookout, not daydreaming about grass. You might want to have her fall into the grass and that's why her landing is so comforting, or she could even roll into it after she falls. Then he pulls her to her feet.
Some insight into the character's past is always good. There could have been more, but it seems that most of that is going to be found out along with the characters, since she can't remember.

haha. too much? lol, I think you put just the right amount in. :) nice chappie. please update agian soon

Well, as always good scenario description here and I truly wonder how you will do the Velsing-Glordiana link. And I truly wonder when Geroe will get his karma although I prefer to think that Velsing will be executor. Given his nature I doubt he has anything to lose anyway. As for the issue on the past in your A/N. tbh I think it would be better if you did the whole thing from person's POV rather than just simple narration even if it is from that person him/herself. In this way, you can actually make the reader feel for him/her. Maybe you will want to try the technique of flashback. tbh it's much easier than you might think otherwise. At least for me, it's no big problem. Just focus on what you want to show and add in the flesh to the skeleton. Now it isn't that hard is it? ;)

It was a great intro to the what was before...Done wonderfully truly. Love the style and how the characters are described still.

again. nice work.
fyi- the last chapter had a lot of errors in it. :) but it was still very readable

You have a bit of a contradiction here. Earlier in the chapter you said that she didn't have anything in her stomach to throw up, but by the end of the chapter, you have her doing just that. Technically, she could still vomit bile or even water if she had any of that in the last few hours. Otherwise, it wasn't bad. I'm 99.9% sure that it's Velsing, which is what I was expecting to happen when she fell and everything seemed lost. Not that it's necessarily bad, as long as things aren't always predictable. An unexpected turn is always nice for the reader. But us girls usually do like a bit of knight in shining armor now and again.

great chapter!

nice chapter

ooh. it's getting interesting. Nice work

I'll bet one bazillion bucks on the line that Velsing is the one who saved Glordiana. That is unless you choose to pull a stunner. ;) With that being said though, good chapter here on the whole. Mostly filler until the end, but I do see some aspects of Glordiana's character that may play a part in the plot. Namely her unknown past. And speaking of this area, tbh I think you will do well if you input certain figments of her memory in the future chapter. Ditto for Velsing as well. In this way, you can make the reader gradually feel for them. Sometimes, doing things this way is much more better tha letting everything to the reader unto a state of mind shock without a warning. ;) Aparr from that, nothing much to say. And yeah, A Ranger's tale has been updated just now. Hope to see your review for it soon! ^^ Bye! :)

Okay, me back again. :) Anyway, interesting filler here. You really did a good job on Velsing's character and the current paradox plaguing him. Also the scenario was well described as well. And yep, I guess the priest knew something that I still haven't known yet. Definitely it has something to do with Glordiana and Velsing. I think that one was a no-brainer for sure.

Anyway, I guess the latter part of this chapter really paved the way for the future plot not to mention that I'll most likely have a good idea on Glordiana and Velsing's character developments. ;) And yeah, the end of this chapter. Does that mean that Velsing had took up Geroe's offer? Sorry if I sound dumb here. My brain got fried by going through 60+ pages of a certain forum just to get a certain idea on the storyline behind one of my current favourite games. :S

Also the name Velsing reminds me of Van Helsing for some wierd reason. Did you plan that on purpose? :D

Sorry I accidentally skipped over this one! Personally, I didn't think anything was missing. There's only one nit-picky thing. Almost halfway through, you say this: "Now she didn't want Velsing to make a mistake." But she only knows him as Adrian. She realizes a little later that he is the infamous Velsing. Hopefully, I won't end up skipping one again next time!