I didn't like the break between the second and third stanza. It seemed a bit awkward to me. Also, I have to say I was not a big fan of that last sentence. It's just such a cliched sentence, which was really sad since the piece itself was great. Your descriptions were really nice, you had great word choices and I liked the format as well.

Okay... CREEPY! This is like almost exactly what I've been going through with my ex and our relationship. That's a bit ironic. XD

I like the format in this; how attractively it sits on the page and draws your eyes from left to right. interesting piece! nicely written =]