spelling mistake somewhere in the middle, compliment became compiment. a pretty nice story overall.

This is quite good, i mean i did read a few sentences before but decided it was too boring. Then i took a look again after looking at the review counts and i understand why its so high, the characters are quite defined, i can sort of get a rough idea on the traits of each character. One of the better story i have read here.

What the heck?! How can you end the chapter like that?!?! No fair :(

I'm sure you're tired of hearing this, but it was really great--again, lol. However, there was one mistake. At one point instead of saying "I" you said "Melissa", as if the story was in third person. Just thought you'd like to know :)

PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!

~J. Lynn

lol. what a quick update! Thank you for such an action-filled chapter! I really enjoyed it!
Please surprise me with Ekeziel next time! XD
Delineations . Alyona

XD

Yes, you are a tease.

I see something with Melissa with Roger there...Hehe.

I stayed up till 12AM just to read this story. I love the story line, plots, and how you have written this.

So...I finished this about an hour ago and I've got to say, this is one of the better (if not one of the best) stories I've seen here on FP. I love the whole premise; it's such a different take on the whole addiction thing! I'm in love with all the characters, even Ezekiel; he's just so devilishly evil!

Anyway, I wish FP had like a rating system so I could give this the best possible rating that I could, but alas, FP is in need of a couple years of updates... I encourage you to write more, because this was honestly one of the few stories that have captured my attention on FictionPress, and I'd love to know how this all pans out!

-jimenarocker

What? That's it? Dang cliff hangers! lol

Very good, as always, although there was one small mistake: "made his way to looked like a panel of buttons." I think you meant to say "what looked like" and just forgot it; I do stuff like that all the time. Just thought you'd like to know :)

Anyway, can't wait for the next chapter! And I still think something's going to happen between Melissa and Roger hehe

~J. Lynn

Two words for this chapter: Thug Life! Well, sophisticated thug life, but damn Ezekiel is good! And Blue Kitten doesn't sound like fun=/ but at least Melissa is alive for another chapter:)

well... the dying bit was quite intense... Well written tho! So its' cool!
I Love This Story! x
Hope you can update soon again!! Looking forward to it!! XD
Delineations . Alyona

This was exactly the kind of action ive been looking for in stories on this site!
This chapter was so intense. I loved it!
Cant wait for the next update.
:)

That was so good! Lots of suspense! Im glad that i stumbled across this story! It is truly a great story! Keep you the good work!

Cliffhanger ah! Well seems like some (extremely) unlucky person is about to face the wrath of Ezekiel! I can't wait=)

Again, good job! However, I was kind of disappointed by how short it was... Hopefully the next chapter is longer!


Anyway, it was good writing, as always. The only thing I might change is when Rosa, Roger, and Melissa are talking, at times it's a bit unclear who's speaking until after the fact. I understand the conversation is meant to flow quickly, but it might be a little clearer if you added "_ said" or something more often.

Other than that, though, it was great! :)

Waiting for the next chapter,
~J. Lynn

Oh the suspense is killing me.
This was a great chapter.
Please update soon. :)