Aw, this is so cute! I can almost imagine the song, and see what's happening. I love the characters! Every word is thought out, short and sweet. The relationship you created is the perfect stereotype of a perfect relationship. You show the gentle and calm love of the characters clearly, it's very sweet. Love it!

CL

This was really cute. Definitely painted a great mental picture in my head with a very delicate mood. A little surprising twist at the end with what you did there, but it made it unique. Good job, and keep writing!