excellent poem, it flows very well, and some parts have a beautiful rhythm to them. the second part i liked a little better. it was more visual and easier to follow. the first part had a couple lines that didn't really seem to go with the rhythm of the rest of the poem
"this is it's duty, to be shone; a beacon,
shown itself to the world"
'to be shone' doesn't seem to fit, i don't know if it was a spelling mistake or what, and it also sounds uncomfortably similar to 'shown' in the next line.
apart from that i really enjoyed it, good job, and thanks for the reviews. i love it when i get real critisism :)