Whoot whoot! Look who's finally reviewing!! XD

HUM, well. *Has no idea where to start*

First off - SQUEE! it's SO COOL! lol. I love it all so much. Okay, trying to expand on that. Umm...

Overall: Anna's 'journey'/character development is seriously cool, lol I reread some of the start a while ago (cos I brought up the Word doco with it saved on so my sister could read it XD XD she LOVES it too btw!) and MAN Anna was so goody-good! She's much more like a person now! lol. But at the same time, you never really didn't like her, or anything. Which is quite a feat, fyi! ;D And her growth has been very realistic too. Like, subtle but compelling changes, as opposed to sudden epiphanies about the nature of humanity/evil or something silly.

And I just LOVE Josh! Haha. I can't wait for him to show up at the school... and/or for him to start realising loving Anna is having an effect on HIM, too! (because of course it is... LOL ;D)

Okay, plot-wise... Im glad the Wolf's gone, the way Anna just like LOVED him when we knew he wasnt anything like what she THOUGHT he was like was awful!! But it has really cool potential too - for when he comes BACK into things, I mean! But Im really glad he's out of the equation for a little while, so Anna and Josh can settle into their own relationship-y-ness, ie. Anna can start to trust Josh and think of him as a friend (lol, already accomplished XD) and then Anna can be more... her own person/not reliant on the Wolf when he does come back... tho she's gonna get soo mad at Josh... O.o ;D

And Josh staying with Anna while she cried and even after she was asleep was so cute. *Squee!*

This-chapter-wise... for starters there's a couple of spelling mistakes (LOL it doesnt MATTER, I only noticed cos you usually dont make any, I guess! ;D) At one point I think Josh has no feet... "Josh sat down on the couch for all the world as though it were his own house and put his up on the table." HEH HEH HEH =D

Anna's telling everything to Safia was very cool, but I felt maybe kind of abrupt. Like, it's a good way and place and time for telling Safia, and it's great that her friend is now involved, but she hasnt really been dwelling much on it being hard to keep School and Home/Josh seperate. There could perhaps have been a little more... Safia being confused by Anna being preoccupied with her home stuff/Safia being concerned that Anna's being weird or cryptic/Anna struggling with keeping secrets/having so much going on that her best friend and everyone at school doesnt know about ... and THEN it all sort of comes to a head with the - one time when she's feeling like this she gets Josh's voice in her head telling her Saf can take it and so she snaps and just tells Safia everything.

You see what I mean? It's like, the tiniest little issue, and it doesnt matter anyway cos its something that would be added in to a bunch of previous chapters, maybe, but I just sort of felt like... Anna spilling her secrets should be a big, intense deal, because they're some killer secrets!, and that intense-ness could have come from a longer, drawn out wanting-to-tell-but-not-telling kinda thing. As it is, it seems very simple and while it's a SERIOUSLY COOL development (*LOVES Safia telling Anna how great Josh is!* that was SO COOL! XD) it's almost like, '...why didnt she do this ages ago?!' lol.

Haha. That's the only real review-y thing I can think of though! I loved Safia in the house... "Anna wasn't bothered by the lack of permission. Josh was far worse." CRACKED ME UP XD ... the 'all you own are uniforms and PJs!' thing was HILARIOUS - because of how it all started, with Anna angsting over what to wear to bed - LOL. And then as I said, all the 'Josh is SO COOL!'/*stares at him* stuff was classic =D I can so see that, Josh laxed out on the couch, Anna watching him and Safia with a bemused expression, Safia staring between them/mouthing 'W-O-W!' at Anna... great times XD XD The ending was so nice, too. Well, except for the 'It wouldnt last long' part! ;D

Umm I think that's all I have to say for now! This was fun, I can't believe it took so long for me to get round to it!! I'll review the next chapter way sooner haha. So you have to WRITE IT!! NOW! XD XD

~Arrow~

As well as being a devil story, it is a romance fanfic right?
I just wanted to know because this story is in the romance category and so far, there is no romance in it...well, apart from the thing with Hussein...but I'm fairly sure that Hussein is a just a supporting character (right?)
On the other hand, you write really well! I like it! The ideas and plot of the story so far is really good! It's interesting instead of being predictable. That is kind of hard to find these days, don't you think? :)

Okay, so between work and work and rehearsal for my show, I haven't been able to read much. But I read this cause I saw it in my C2 archives, and it looked mildly interesting. And here I am, almost four hours later, finishing the last chapter you've posted. I have one thing to say: MORE!

Uhh... Did NOT see that one coming... Not much anyway... Blaringly obvious in the first few chapters, but then doubt wormed in and BAM! Very good.

this might sound odd, but coming from a christian perspective and also i writers perspective, this story is beyond words. Like seriously you should publish this. The way you write is almost like Dan Brown, the author of the Da Vinci Code. You weave truth and an intricate plot together in such a way that you make me want to believe it all. You make a great case with religion without totally slamming it. You are amazing, keep doing what you do because it is truly a gift.

~Crystal Red Roses

Well, that took time. LOL. You're right, this chapter doesn't meet your standards. Hoping to see more of you, 'cause I really like this story. :D

plz plz plz update soon.

Your Story + Reading It = pure AWESOMENESS

That's enough math for today.

But seriously, I like began reading this 12 hours ago and haven't stopped since.

It's REALLY original and I love it. And I usually don't like stories from the 3rd person perspective because it feels detached and unrelatable to me, but with this one I didn't even notice it after the 2nd chapter.

It was like a roller coaster of emotions. *does the wave with self*

To sum this review up:

You + Updating Soon = Happy Me :)

P.S. Is unrelatable a word? I'm so confused. :/

Geezums!
The ending is so happy, and then, with only one sentence, it is super de duper DePrEsSiNg!!

I have this feeling that the reason Anna's peace won't last long is either because or Josh, or the Wolf (but turned man, right?)... hm... i wonder if I am right... :/

Besides that, I like that Anna has finally told someone at least part of what has been happening to her. :)


PLEASE UPDATE [A][S][A][P]!


~Mo~

Love the chapter :)
"It wouldn't last long."
Woah, I sense some foreshadowing going on!

aw. yay.
she'll realize soon enough.
they make a cute couple.
ahahaha.


you'd better update soon :)

You better update soon! *mock glares* But I liked that chapter... :D Awesome job!

“Hey, Safia ... fancy meeting you here.” hahahah who says that? It's fancy reading this story. Hahahah. Finally you update! I like the chapter! It's wonderful! Please PLEASE update with a new chapter SON as in the next week, not 3 weeks XD hahaa. Keep on writing! UPDATE!

Aw! In dont want the chapter to end there! Safia was entertaining :(

FINALLY. I can be patient and everything, but I love this story so much that when I log onto MSN, and I find there's an email, I think "Please let there be a new chapter. Please let there be a new chapter..." but I try not to keep my hopes up, cos if I do, I just put myself in a sad mood if it isnt another chapter and it's just another peice of effing JUNK MAIL.
Seriously, the only email that really shines in my inbox anymore is the one from FictionPress telling me you've put up a new chapter. Today I got 4 emails, one being junk, one from MTV, one from this stupid iMesh thing, and the last one from FictionPress saying that YOU'VE PUT UP A NEW CHAPTER! I seriously screamed "YAY!" and almost toppled out of bed when I saw that email. Lol, that sounded weird, may I remind you that it's morning here and i'm using the laptop and I really cant be stuffed getting out of bed XD.

Oh man, Safia is just so cool right now. she's oober coolness in it's entirety.

Aw, nice Joshy. She needed a friend :) and BAD JOSHY! why'd you kill Kane? He was relatively cool :/ by the way, graphic scene much?! I was cringing from imagining how Kane died. Or maybe I've got a weak stomach when it comes to the blood and guts...wait, no, I've seen 300 and didnt chuck up in a toilet. I'm not scolding you or anything, lol, write as many blood and gore scene's as you like! but that was so...sudden? I dont know how to say it. Seeing a head being chopped off is one thing, but slicing a body in half is another. Like off Underworld! Where that really old dude is chopped at his shoulders and it's all like "ew". ahaha, it's almost as bad as the scene where some person get's completely choppified by the helicopter, now that was awesome special effects (I hope :P)

Oh My God, I swear, I have a talent for going off topic. No wonder why my essays get graded badly XD

I don't know why your not satisfied with this chapter, I liked it :/ I would've liked some more funny reactions from Safia when it comes to Josh, but sometimes the moment produces so many gay babies that you really have to stop where you are XD

WO! YOU HAVE OVER 400 REVIEWS! *gives an ooberly huge hug*

Awesome chapter, as always Deena Dear :) I hope school is treating you nicely :)

Toodles, for now :}

Peace,
Natalie :)

AWESOME! Keep up the AWESOMENESS...yeah yeah i know thats not really a word. who really cares! : )