this is quite well done, particularly the last few lines, which do very well to express the sense of falling, or losing something close to you

good job

"and she would scream but the sound is anchored in her feet."

Beautiful. Some of your lines are radiant. They might'nt mean much literally, but since when has poetry been meant to touch the intellect before the heart? I feel your words in me and they vibrate with truth.

The line break in "slipping" is very clever, and the italicized "away" that really does make it seem like the word is drifting away. The concept that fire can slip like water through hands is gorgeous; well done.

"wishing the rain really was acid,

but she can't be sure,

because everything feels so cruel,"

I love this :D

Great work!