|Reviews for Little Lily of the Valley|
| Cooked Juice 1/8/11 . chapter 10
SO CUTE. Echo can really be super cool when he wants to. The driver part is so cute. He is the gentleman for Eternity but... the other side of his is so cool.
| WHOOOOOO 1/8/11 . chapter 1
| Miya 1/4/11 . chapter 10
Aw so cute!
I hope you update soon!
No, really, if you don't update I'll die D:
Eternity x Halcyon forever!
Man, if they don't end up together, I'll be pissed...unless it's a 3some ;)
Yeah I've done enough freaking out people for today.
| Miya 1/4/11 . chapter 1
Ei!So good, great, fantastic, amazing!
| Malik 1/2/11 . chapter 10
Yay! I love this so much!
Thank you for finally coming out with chapter ten!
It was WONDERFUL!
Eternity is my sweetheart :3
Anyway, can't wait for chapter 11!
On to your new story ;)
| Mercy Ride 12/31/10 . chapter 9
Aww I love this so much!
Please update soon!
I think Eternity and Halcyon should be together
and Echo and Marguerite should be together!
Those couple are so sweet!
Ah they just flow together...I dunno.
Anyway, UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!
| Shawny 12/26/10 . chapter 9
You have GOT to update!
I can't can't can't can't WAIT! *fangirl squeal*
Ah...I need to stop doing that...
| Shika 12/26/10 . chapter 9
| nemean045 12/17/10 . chapter 9
I really love your story! The plot is awesome and Eternity is so cute! XD (love Halycon more though).
Please update! ;D
| EvenWhiteRosesCanTurnBlack 8/9/10 . chapter 9
I love this chappie! (along with the others)
I feel really bad for Marguerite! TTTT
I loved the preview:
"You never know. We can be, like, the first victims if the screws go loose while we are at the summit of the ride. Then we can all scream Halleluiah to the camera, smile to the descending angels that come for us, and then the free fall sensation, the last view of our life, then the ugly ground, squash! We died." Echo frantically described his horror in poor phrasing.
Lol, Echohilarious! Even thought I hate him for liking Eternity, I guess I'll let him off this time...
Update quickly please!
| TheAjousama 8/2/10 . chapter 9
All your pairings are so cute and ftw!
Poor Maguerite but surely u'll find someone nice for her, right?
Nice chappie. Looking forward 4 more.
| Niki Tori 8/2/10 . chapter 9
Great update! I really enjoyed the read. And yes Theo and Shahana make a perfect couple! Though I can't help but feel sorry for Marguerite. Everything was very nicely done!
Much Love and Many Hugs
| Narq 8/1/10 . chapter 9
It has been SUCH a long time since you've updated, I've almost forgotten about this story. 'almost'.
"he patted the Asian girl on her hair." - on the head, you mean?
Yeah, the confession was cute, the asian girl was cute in her stammering and such,, you did well (on dialgoue) with that.
The bit with that yucky yucky Rexter was VERY well written. I was simply hangning on the edge of my seat, wondering what could happen - I know you to be a very ruthless writer so I got really scared for a sec!
In the end though, wouldn't someone be looking after the old guy who got tossed aside (and may have broke a few bones?)
but whoa, look out FPers, Eternity is back! XD
| Madam A 8/1/10 . chapter 9
Cute story. I'm in heart love. The characters are adorable max. Eternity needs a stronger backbone to fight pervs. Shanana is awesome for a supporting character. I like her entrance sceen, coolness.
My favorite chapter.
| Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu 8/1/10 . chapter 6
Herro there. You may know me as a new reviewer, but I've been onto this story for N ages albeit due to a bzt brain, I've failed to catch up on your recent updates. -.- Yeah, you've forgotten me I guess. Previous nick was Mr Ragna Badguy. Before that was wolfblood82. And even way before that was mt first nick aka rangerboi. Man it feels weird for me to go back into history lol! XD
Anyway, I've just tried to jog my memory on this one and it seems that everything has gone smoothly for me. Okay for starters, it's good to see a new character here. I wonder if he's a new vital one. Well basically Echo got me interested, but only because he might be part of the vital cast. I don't fault you for bringing in a potentially vital new character, but I think you could have tried and gave him a certain identity in his character so as to make the readers remember him better. You know stuff like features not common in this story, his own show of personality, things like that. So far my only impression was like an above average looking guy who was a charmer at the very core. That's all. I don't actually feel any attachment towards him as a character, so this is one area you need to look out for. After all, first impressions count the most for a character. That is unless he's only there for shit and giggles. -.-
Another thing I need to highlight is that while you did a decent job on the interaction between Eternity and Echo, I think that you could have created a feel of reality within the recounting of the past. Basically I've got no problem in you doing the scenario on the process in Eternity going to school and how he first met Echo. However, you've missed out the most important point that would have a defining impact on the relationship itself where the readers are concerned. And that is, what has gone on during their first meeting? You listed the general idea directly, but that's not enough for the readers to truly feel for their relationship. How did their first real conversation started off? Is there any friction in between throughout their friendship? How did Echo exactly help Eternity out in school during different difficulties and inconveniences especially when we're talking about the potential threat of jealous bullies? All these can and will contribute a lot to the credibility of their relationship. Effort of word via generalizing won't be enough.
Apart from the two areas of critique, nothing much to say here. And yeah, how did the blue fuck Halcyon got his way here? It's really freaky. At least I remember that cats don't have an extensive memory. Dogs on the other hand is a different manner. Back in the good old times where I wasn't even born, dogs have been known to remember routes that they've gone around just once. That's why when people abandon them, they make sure not to let the mutt have a good view on the direction via stuffing it into a sack. If they screwed, they can be very sure that the doggy will come back right at the doorstep within a twenty four hour span. ;)
P.S: I'm not too sure if you've owed me anything, so just return this review via A Ranger's Tale. You've stopped at chapter 5, but given the fact that you've gone MIA here for so long, I suggest that you browse back to have a recap on what's going on so far. :)