|Reviews for Forbidden|
| BlueMoonlily 12/4/10 . chapter 2
when you do an A/N at the bottom can you put a line or something to tell us readers that its not part of the story? would be helpful
| BlueMoonlily 12/4/10 . chapter 1
hmm kinda fast paced but i like that :) kinda tired of the slower stories lol i like it so far :)
| Aneesha 12/4/10 . chapter 19
Omg they got caught!
Shiieet! I have a feeling that courtney's gonna tell someone.. Or maybe
hint at it at softball practice or something.
Update soon please I wanna know what happens!
| Rio's Desire 11/24/10 . chapter 18
HEY! I squealed when I saw this new chapter sitting in my inbox waiting to be read! I am so glad you returned cause this story just wants to get spicy! I want them to have sex haha.
| GirlWithTheDancingCherryTrees 11/22/10 . chapter 1
I think you made the attraction show a bit too quickly (I mean, it's the first chapter, lol!). He came on too strong, too fast for me. But, do not make this doubt that I don't like your story! I really like Kylie's personality, yes, very much so. It's good so far.
| LovingBlackParadise1 11/13/10 . chapter 18
Say the word! ! Say the word
| fanfanatic13 11/13/10 . chapter 18
IM SO HAPPY UR BACK **jumps around happily** keep updating and LEMONS. lmao thank you this totally made my night!
| Sweet-Cakesz24 11/12/10 . chapter 18
ohh damm, bow chica bow wow! Ughh finally! I want them to have sex already!
| Aneesha 11/9/10 . chapter 18
yea! you're backk! :D
lol i looved the chapter, and o lala! he's the coach..yum ;D haha
| EnglishStudent101 10/2/10 . chapter 17
Oh please please please finish this! I've been waiting forever! I've read and reread this so many times and I'm DYING for it to be finished. You can't just not finish it, you'd absolutely break my heart. Your writing is fabulous as I'm sure you know and I'm salivating to read more. Please finish this, I'm begging you! I'm so impressed with how this story has progressed and how rounded the characters are and I just want to hear more! Please don't give up on this. Not yet. Please.
| Chausten 8/8/10 . chapter 16
I haven't read all your reviews, so I'm sorry if this one repeats some things you've already heard...
So overall, I like your style, and you've done a fairly good job at pacing (I thought the beginning was a little abrupt, but after it's been kind of a nice development).
The thing I find most lacking in this story are your characters. You're obviously very invested in them; that comes through, but they don't have enough depth and variation yet. Kylie is, and I'm going to use that dreaded term, a Mary Sue. I hate to use it, too, because I've written my fair share of them-but she has some of the most classic signs of female perfection in a story. (And I won't accept that her "flaw" is having affairs with teachers, since this is 1) the point of the story, and 2) actually seems to be somewhat condoned in it, or at least is romanticized). Similarly, Mr. Scott does not act, think, or talk like any high school teacher I've ever met, except his occasional standard line of "come see me after class," etc. In fact, I'd say KYLIE sounds much more like the adult, and HE sounds much more like the high schooler.
His situation with his wife is...cliché, but allowable, if you develop her character a bit more as well. I am such a sucker for love triangles, I'd be all in for the wife if it wasn't so EASY for everyone to just have her be a bitch. Kylie's wonderful and perfect; Christina's Satan-in-a-skirt-well, who d'ya sympathize with?
Another situation I had a little difficulty with is, as I mentioned, the way you're treating teacher/student relationships here. I can't step in and go, THIS IS WHAT YOU MUST THINK, but I find it a little creepy that Kylie's friends thought it more cool than disturbing that she kissed a teacher. If one of my friends in HS had told me that had happened, I'd have been worrying about sexual harassment and statutory rape and things like that, no matter how hot the teacher was.
Sorry if the review came off a little harsh. I think I tend to focus too much on giving criticism and less on positive aspects in reviews. I hope to see more of this. And as for your flamer, I saw nothing even remotely useful in those reviews to make me want to take her seriously.
Good luck and hope to see you back soon!
| Alice Choi 7/6/10 . chapter 17
Hi love-forever! i don't know why, but i was IN LOVE with your amazing story! to be truthful, i skimmed on some parts in chapters, but just cause i wanted to get to the romantic parts :D HAHAHA i hope you will post the rest soon! btw, are you? cause i saw chapter 17 published last year.. so i was worried if you weren't going to publish it anymore ):
| Jordan 5/24/10 . chapter 10
Oh my god! I can't believe you made a reference to The Hollow Kingdom! I LOVE THAT BOOK!
I love the whole series, but the first is my favorite. oh my gosh. Haha. Gotta calm myself down for a sec.
I like the story so far. I usually like editing stories and pointing things out, but the whole reference messed up my train of thought. Sorry. I like the story so far though. Glad he finally visited her.
| horsegril333 5/9/10 . chapter 12
It remeinds of my teacher
I love teacher and student relasonships!
| horsegril333 5/7/10 . chapter 6
I love it