I love the title of your piece first off - I adore long titles.

I feel like this poem was a bit off kilter, which I liked, but I also felt like I couldn’t quite pin down your overall message. I couldn’t interpreter a solid meaning for the overall piece.

A few of the sections don’t make since as is: ‘we alive, and we mortal few’ I feel like something more should come in the ‘we alive’ section. Keep up the good work.

Much love,

Juliet.

Great sound and progression. I like how the compact structure enhances the quick hitting nature of the tone. Good write. MD:77.

Neat. )

abby

Every time I read a poem of yours I just love your poetry even more. I don't think I've ever been disappointed by anything that you've written. ]

i like this sequel, or rather,

this footnote, or rather, the

twain in tandem, or rather, the

clarification, the exegesis. i

wonder why we both felt compelled

to write abt protection today; i

guess it's cos the wind out there

is so cold right now. we mortal

few, and the expectations of

england. the weight of our

burden called being alive.