Wow this was very good, very twisted. But i liked it.

How incredibly twisted...and I couldn't help but love it o.O Cyress is like, uber evil...I'd marry him xD

I'm glad I came across your stories..it's down rite heaven. very steamy.. i like it ^^

That took guts to write. Nicely written as always.

This was beautiful!
Easily one of your best stories~

interesting and dark!

lol, the ending was sort of fucked-up by moral standards, but it fit with the story. it was really well-written, and i enjoyed reading it. (:

Love it, especially all its references to fairy tales!

That was actually the best yaoi i have probably ever read. it was weird, twisted, and... realy twisted... but thhats in a good way. i like the wholle twist to the childrens story... all in all that was awesome

I'm not sure if this is happy or not. Definitely a more modern and twisted twist on the fairy tale. I like it though. Hella hot.

Well, this wins for kinkiest. Yeesh. But in a good way, definitely. Hmm. Yeah, no, I liked it. It was... what would be the technical term? It was... thought-provoking. Yes. Let's go with that.

I loved how twisted it was! and the little twist at the end with Cyress hooking up witht them. Write a sequel! please!

Aw... I LOVE THE ENDING! This story is SO twisted, but it's absolutely AMAZING! If you ever write more on this one, then I will TOTALLY read it!!
The only part that I thought could be a bit more descriptive, is when they walk into the apartment, they don't say anything about the state of cleanliness, but then when Gavril has to clean, it's suddenly disgustingly dirty... So maybe if you could mention that it is very dirty before that scene... I was just a little surprised there...
But definitely my favorite Challenge so far!
Lee

*fans self* Damn that was hot~ I loved this, it was a brilliant re-write and I love the twist of Cyress becoming part of the relationship! Great work!

June
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