I know how it is to not want to change a poem you like, though it needs editing. That's when you just make a #2 or a new poem about the same thing...its like taking your old one and revising it, but keeping it at the same time. But, that is not to say that this poem needs that much revision. It love it. I love poems that for all purposes seem normal, yet are not. And this one is hilarious. I love it. My only suggestion is to only capitalize letters at the beginning of an actual sentence, not every line. Also, I don't think you need the explanations at the beginning.